Hi Louisa,
This is Agnelo and it’s a great opportunity and my pleasure to read and review your work titled "The Promise" Highlights:
Wow! Beautifully expressed emotions that touched my heart.
You have used all the seasons well to express the feelings and each couplet makes perfect sense about losing someone and the loneliness felt.
The flow as well as the rhyme was perfect. Favorites:
The last couplet was the best of all. Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
Nothing that I noticed Suggestions:
Nothing except that write more of these.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Jeff,
This is Agnelo and it’s a great opportunity and my pleasure to read and review your work titled "Gathering Clouds" Highlights:
Nice poem. The times we spend with our children always bring smiles of joy and happiness. These memories last a life time. The innocence with which they suprise us is worth the time we spend with them. Being a father myself, I can relate very much to the things you have written. We also have to be ready for the day they grow up and want to be on their own. But that is part of life and we have to accept it, and pray for their well-being. The least we can do.
The flow of the poem was good. You have used AABB style for rhyming and it is perfect in most of the lines except for face/haste, sun/some, galore/before, them/again. Favorites:
The last stanza was very emotional Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions:
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Chelsea,
This is Agnelo and it’s a great opportunity and my pleasure to read and review your work titled "Smile at the Shoreline" Highlights:
Excellent write and a perfect description of emotions with enough imagery.
I enjoyed reading this one and even though its a long one, the flow was so good that, I could read it in one go. Well done. Favorites:
There are so many lines which I would like to mention but the most I liked was the transition from the first two lines to the last two lines. From weakness to strength. That was a very logical end.: : Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
Nothing that I noticed Suggestions:
You have got everything in place
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Cassie
This is Agnelo and it’s a great opportunity and my pleasure to read and review your work titled "Gift" Highlights:
The poem is very inspirational. In the first place pursue ones goals in all adversities and even though there are so many obstacles trust that one day success will be yours. I observed a couple of rhyming lines even though this is more of a free verse. Favorites:
"Until then dance in the rain, and
enjoy it when you can take credit." Positive attitude and patience well defined in these two lines Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
"Was there is no more." I thought you need to review this line again. "was" and "is" is in conflict. Suggestions:
If you could break up this into separate stanzas then it would look good.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Inkblots,
This is Agnelo and it’s a great opportunity and my pleasure to read and review your work titled "The Door"
Highlights:
From what I read this poem is about two people who at one time were in love with each other and about the promises made to each other, which are now silently closed/buried deep inside.
Nicely written! You have used AABB rhyme pattern and this makes the reading good. Favorites:
The third stanza is good specially when you mention the shape of the door.
Grammar/Punctuation/Typos:
I would suggest the use of periods and a tweak with commas so that the flow becomes still better.
Suggestions:
"A little door that’s stored deep inside" - Is it good to use "placed" instead of "stored"? Just my thought.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Holden
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “When Nothing seems to last “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
A short and sweet piece which I liked for both, the message and the rhyming in particular.
The flow was good and it was easy to read. As I said earlier the rhyming was good Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
The punctuation, grammar was good and I did not notice any typos. Suggestions/Comments
A small suggestion that you provide a space after the line ending with "empty". So that the two stanzas are separated. Also there is extra spacing at the top of the page which you could eliminate. Well this is just my thoughts and you would know better.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Chbedok,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Images of Christ “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem and I liked the theme with which you have nicely shown that we can find God in everything around us. The images of the rag/bone picker, gardener, knight and the wanderer add meaning to what you say in the last stanza.
The flow of the poem was good. About rhyming, I could see that you have rhymed the first stanza but the other verses are free verse. But this doesn't make your work less appealing.
"Wandering the darkness;
A lantern in his hand saying
"Come, follow me";
"Let me guide your path";
This happens to be my favorite verse. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing that I could mention Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear jpmurphy,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Stay “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem..Loved reading it.
The flow is good. You have used a rhyme pattern of "ABAB" and the rhyme is perfect except for "see-enemy, freely-me, checked-neck (check-neck)"
"My favorite stanza:
Each breath that I take
Is shallow and quick
How can love make
One feel so sick" Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
"Your soul-piercing eyes" - you could use a "-" to make it a sound better?? Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear featherpen
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “This is a friend “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Eventhough there are lots of poems written on Friends and Friendship, I truly enjoyed this one. I could note that it is written with simple words that must have just popped out of your heart. You have very well tried to reflect the qualities of a true friend and the message is clear that we need to take care that once we find one, never leave them.
The rhyming was good except in one "up-stop"
The last two lines says it all "This is a friend that will love you forever
Treat them right and they will leave you never". Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
With spacing after two lines thus making it as couplets, it would make the flow better and easy to read. I am of the opinion that presentation also makes an impact on the reader. The one who is worth your while
Is the one who always makes you smile
Embraces your laughs as much as your tears
Encourages your dreams, helps you through your fears
Hugs you when you really needs it
When you laugh till you cry or throws a fit
and so forth for the other lines.
But then this is just my thought and you would know better to accept or no ,this suggestion Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Osirantinous,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Amazon “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
An emotinally knit poem about a mother, a woman fighting against cancer. Your comparison of her with the Amazon women reflects the grit and determination and nothing else matters. I wish that many others who are affected by cancer take time to read this piece and draw inspiration.
Liked the poetry form which you have written. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific to mention Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear RaisaRashed,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Someday “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Well written emotions of a daughter who finds it difficult to see her father leave home for work. It is always painful during such good-byes and I could well perceive what must be going through the mind of the daughter. In such circumstances, even the father finds it difficult to leave and I say this from my personal experience.
The flow of the poem was good and easy to read.
My favorite stanza was - "Just hold my hand right now...Maybe I won’t be till I live in a dorm."
You have used a rhyme pattern of "abab" which is good except in the last stanza where "me-baby" do not rhyme. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing that I noticed. Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Jessie,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Take Hold “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Very well written and inspirational!
True we need to go all out and live the dreams that exists in our hearts. Unless and until we dont do that, those dreams will die with us. The need to try is very much essential, even though there will be trouble and discouragement from others. But nothing matters more than our hearts desire.
"Take hold,... before, but wish to be" This stanza was my favorite
I found the flow good and easy to read. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Did not notice any Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Than Pence,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Waterless “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
I enjoyed reading this fun poem! Very nice. The flow of the poem is good and the rhyming is perfect throughout except for "home-alone". Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
The last stanza was the best and my favorite.
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
Hope that you have paid the bill by now...LOL!
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear CJThomasson,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “I can't tell you “.
Thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
First of all let me wish you and your wife a happy wedding anniversay and May God Bless You both with His choicest blessings always! Highlights:
This was a very nice tribute to your wife. The imagery is very nice. It is difficult to describe the moments shared together because each one has its own joy but you have done a nice job over here with this piece. I can see that you love your wife very much and even after 20 years nothing seems to have changed. God Bless!
My favorite stanza is What joy to see that one strand of hair
"curled in front of your face ...shine sparkle of the heavens."
I did not find any problem with the flow Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
"How many starts fill the night sky?" There is a small typo noticed in this line and I have marked it in red. Other than that, everything seems to be right. Suggestions/Comments
No suggestions as such but just one and that is "KEEP LOVING"
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear SimplyInspire,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “A Moment in Nature “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem! God is the creator of all things and the nature He has created is so breathtaking,that we definetly find peace just being there. The imagery is good and I liked the first stanza very much.
The transition from the calmness of the nature to your own soul and then to the praise giving/worship and thanking God is done very nicely.
You have used the pronoun "You" for God and capitalised it, was good.
The flow of the poem is good and easy to read. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Elizabeth,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Pen and Paper “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Very nice poem. You have well portrayed the importance of both pen and paper and how they are entwined hand in hand and together they make an impact that can change lives and much more.
The flow is good and so also the rhyming except for "entwined - line".
"entwine" and "line" are rhyming words but it is the tense which makes the difference. This is only minor for me and does not affect the purpose of the poem in any way.It was a good read overall Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Patty,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Beware “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Enjoyed reading your contribution. The flow is good. There is consistency in the syllable count except in the 3rd Line of 2nd stanza, but I did not find any break in the rhythm while reading due to this.
Imagery is good. The rhyming in the first stanza is good and the poem would sound even better, had you tried the same rhyming pattern in the 2nd stanza.
Children would definetely love this poem. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific that I noted. Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear turtlehermit,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Pride “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem with good rhyming scheme maintained through out. Easy flow makes reading easy.
We fail when we place pride at the top. It is better to know our limitations and be happy with what we are and what we can do is just a gift from God, for which we should be humble at all times. Humility can give us real peace. Well done and Loved your poem. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing that I noticed. Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Rhasperidon,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Fieds “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
I did enjoy reading your poem. Nice work!
"There is no escaping a sorrowful past....These fields that plague." - This part of the poem impressed me a lot. Prayer for a new dawn to escape from the sorrowful past. The imagery is also nice in this section of the poem.
I found the flow good. The rhyming is good though not in a particular pattern Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing that I noticed Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear sammy,
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
The message is clear, on target as intended. Very touching plight of people living in such misery and difficult conditions. New Borns and Children face a bleak future...sad, very sad for us and the whole world. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
"Imagine waking up with only instinct to survive," - I thought having it like "Imagine waking up with instinct,only to survive,"
"I can't believe this happens in a the world with you and I," - "the" is not required in this line. Must have been oversight?
Punctuation is needed is some places. This will improve the flow and easy to read. Suggestions/Comments
I could see you have tried to have a rhyming pattern for the last two lines of each stanza but "late - disintegrate" and "hungry-country" are not perfect rhymes.
Nevertheless, as I have mentioned above, the message is clear and will touch peoples hearts as it has done to me.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear ArtCrusade,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Count on me “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Nice poem. Yes, the devil is the gardener grinning his way into our hearts with those seeds of envy, jealousy, temptation and many more and above all the seed of doubt as you have mentioned in the very beginning.
I did not find any difficulty in the flow. You have used a rhyming pattern of "abab" which is good however I noticed that the rhyming is out of place in 2 places:
die-cries and oaths-growth. That is because of the plural form you have used.
I liked the way you have called the devil a grinning gardener, very apt! Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
"To not be left alone with my hurts and cries," - Suggestion - "not to be left alone with my hurts as I cry," This is a humble suggestion and you may take it or reject as you know what is good for your work.
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear Vianna,
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review your poem " Remember" Highlights:
A great poem, lots ands lots of emotions...brought a tear to my eyes.
I applaud you for so beautifully writing on behalf of your mom about her pains/her thoughts/her emotions and I am sure you could do this because you have seen it all and the last line of your poem says it all
God Bless!
The rhyme pattern is good and the flow is easy. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific to mention Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
So keep writing and keep sharing.
All the best
Take care and have a nice day
Love and Prayers
Agnelo
Dear Taylorhux
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Sweater Weather “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Very well described imagery. Well done!
I could see all those things in front of my eyes and could feel everything as well.
The flow is good and easy Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Hi Cameryn,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Nobody knows us “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same.
Highlights:
In fact the description of this poem was the interest I happen to read and review your work. Very nicely put and I agree with all you have to say.
This is not just the US but even this part of the world.
There is no special line/s since everything is good.
The flow is good. I could see "abcb" rhyme in all the stanzas except the 1st and the last. If you could tweak a bit on this it would help. Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific
Suggestions/Comments
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
Dear JSornon,
It was a pleasure to read your work titled “Pointless “.
First of all, thanks for sharing and giving me an opportunity to review the same. Highlights:
Good read and a nice attempt.
Well, its true that at times desperation is all we find in life and thus makes it pointless as you have mentioned. But there is also a new dawn and as it is said the darkest hour is just before dawn.
"What am I here for?
To be kicked around like a mule." I liked this line,smiled a bit, its my experience too.
Grammar/Punctuations/Typos:
Nothing specific Suggestions/Comments
The word "today" is not actually required in the 2nd line.
The 4th line is too big - disturbs the flow. Is it possible to have smaller lines to make for easy reading?
I would like to inform you that, the above review is solely my personal view. I am a humble writer myself and would never be rude or proud to say that my ideas are better than yours.
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