I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem and it flowed extremely well. The only issue I have is simply that at times I seemed to lose grasp of what exactly you were talking about, but maybe that is not such a bad thing since the essence of the poem is suppose to be how we cannot fully grasp the ultimateness of the universe and maybe you captured that with your style, which is a good thing. Also, the poem didn't really 'move' me, I read it found it an excellent poem, but unlike the 'temple of the sweetest lies' I wasn't moved by the power of the poem. It is more or less a poem that seems to put you at peace. Anyways, I gave a rating of a 4.5 because it was an excellent poem but i just wasn't touched by it and that is really not your fault because I am sure this will affect some readers deeply.
Coz
P.S. You write a very beautiful form and style of poetry that is very difficult to explain. The only way I can explain it is to simply say that when I finish one of your poems and understand it, the first word out of my mouth is "beautiful."
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