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Review of One Woman's Heart  
Review by I
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I like your poem--it's a perfect metaphor for the heart and the beatings it takes. I wish you'd expand upon it and add more vivid descriptions to it--real colorful, easy-to-visualize details--enliven the nature of it. And, I also think you should leave it called just "heart" rather than limiting it to a "woman's heart". It's applicable to any and all hearts.
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Review of A Risky Purchase  
Review by I
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved it! I was a little put-off in the very beginning when you asked me to think of the baby as a "product," but I'm so glad I continued reading. It has such truth to it and an enormous amount of irony. My favorite line, as I attempt to choose among many, is "Even something as simple as a pencil one looks at the price and checks if it includes the eraser." I'm gut-laughing on that line. That's the kind of statement that will come back to me repeatedly over many days to come and make me laugh aloud each time I think of it. Thanks for the joy of laughter.

The "recall program" and other buyer questions were outrageous!

I don't know if this style of writing comes as easily to you as this story makes it appear, but, whether it does or it doesn't, I hope you'll continue writing about such obvious, in-your-face topics that are rarely explored with such focus and humor.

Your writing style reminds me of George Carlin's jokes. I can actually visualize him saying this life on stage! I'm sure he'd add some curse words to it, but it would be a hysterical skit.

And, while the article was so humorous from beginning to end, you concluded on a beautiful note--babies are much more satisfying than new cars redeems the notion of "thinking of babies as products"! So, the wrap-around succeeds astonishingly well!

Peace,
Eileen

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