You've done a very good job of describing these characters. I can easily imagine exactly how each one of them looks. You can further develop them with dialog as they become part of the story. This is a very interesting mix of characters and they interest me enough so I would want to read the entire story.
I like your last paragraph. I like the image of turning an annoyance or handicap into something beautiful. Is there supposed to be something more added to the sentence "And when he is through" or is it supposed to be the beginning of the next sentence?
The first and second paragraphs might actually be better as two separate essays. They are related but if you separated them you could develop each one further.
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