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Review by Aresay
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is great!
The combination of elemental deities and space-born alien races was amazing. This is a great piece combining both Sci-fi and fantasy together in a way that I never expected to happen. The description of Ithaqua's rise and fall through power was also really well done and his discovery of Earth was a pretty cool addition too.

I can't really find any thing to give you any tips for improvement. The way that you put everything together was really good. Keep up the good work!
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Review by Aresay
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, this is great! I really enjoyed this. The idea behind a completely frozen earth fits really well, seeing as the scientists are trying to apply the same concept to real life applications. I was expecting an attack from an animal when Elisha went outside after putting her sister to bed. The ending was really nice. Good work. Keep it up!
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I really liked your description of Death. The oozing pores and a rainbow coloured robe? Two things I though I would never hear being used to describe Death itself.

Though I feel that the stuff leading up to the emergence of Death is a little lacking in back history and depth. I also think that you could break it up into a couple of blocks of writing instead on just one chunk. When I saw the one block of writing, I felt like this was going to be a challenge reading it.

This is just my opinion, so you can just ignore it if you want but I like where is could go, and I'll be waiting to see more.
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