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Review by ashentear
Rated: E | (3.0)
good job! it was fun to read but i felt that it lacked some detail. i just feel that Mrs Weasley would have been a whole lot more emotinonal but her calm and commposed self isn't bad either.
there were also a few grammatical errors that you should proof read and correct.
on the whole it was a good story keep writing!
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Review by ashentear
Rated: E | (4.0)
very nice! great use of alliteration i must say, good job through and through!
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