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Review by bas
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The review is my personal opinion, feel free to ignore any thing that you do not agree with


Hi that is a well written story, does keep the reader gripped. The narration is nice, flipping from past to present in a nice way.
One shortcoming I felt was that the story leaves too many things to the imagination of the reader which at the end gives a feeling of an incomplete story.

Thanks for sharing the item,Enjoyed reading it.

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Review by bas
In affiliation with Smile~Worldwide  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
hi

Nice story, but just a little curious as to is it the end or do you plan to continue it further, cause i felt it kind of ended abruptly.

There is on typo ”Actually, I’m getting pain.’ guess you mean ”Actually, I’m getting paid.’

if you do not approve with any of the review comments please choose to ignore them as they are only my opinion.

Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.

satish

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Review of Farewell  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,

The review is purely my personal opinion, please ignore it if you disagree with any of the points.

This is a very interesting story, and well narrated.But I felt the story leaves way too many things untold. May be a little more description on the situation and their relation make it more fun to read.

A few errors that I noticed were

they gray skies : The grey skies

ill give you my heart : I will give you my heart( the IM slang does not go very well when reading stories *Smile* )

He than : He then ( this mistake is at one few more places i think.).


Thanks for sharing your item, enjoyed reading it.

satish
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Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.5)
hi

That is a really nice story. Some times kids are able to teach us feelings that we as adults forget . *Smile*
Just a small feedback, when writing numbers that are less than ten, its better to spell them as words than write the numbers. Just looks better that way.

The feedback is completely my personal opinion, please choose to ignore it if you do not agree with it.

Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it

satish
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Review by bas
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi that is a very well written story, The mystery sure keeps the readed glued right up till the end.

Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it

bas

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Review of A Long Time  
Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi that is a very well written story. The feelings have been described really well

Enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing the item.


bas
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Review of The Room  
Review by bas
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi that is a very touching story and very well written.

Just one change

he didn't know that ---- he didn't know the

The review is my personal opinion and may be wrong also.

Thanks for sharing the item, had fun reading it

Regards
bas
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Review by bas
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi that is a very well written story. The description keeps the reader engrossed right till the end.

Had fun reading it, thanks for sharing the story.

bas

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Review of I Drive To Relax  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi that is an interesting story. The dialogue with the car is nice and creative.

A few errors

grab ahold---- grab a hold

time ive --- time I have

voide -- void.

Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.

bas


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Review of Gnome Sweet Gnome  
Review by bas
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
hi that is a really funny and creative story. Enjoyed reading it and ending was great *Smile* would be fun to have fairies around to help us isn't it *Smile*

thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.


bas
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Review of Taken  
Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi that is a great story. The thoughts and descriptions have been put across really well

just a typo

as the speed --- as they speed

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Review of The Resting Place  
Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
hi that is a very interesting item, very well written.

just one error...

simpler than most his final ----- simpler than most of his final

had fun reading it thanks for sharing the item

regards
bas.


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Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi I must say that is a very different and interesting item, more like penning down the ramblings of brain, but done pretty well.

The strange way narration kept me glued till the end.

thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it

regards
bas


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Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi that sure is a very inspiring story, every one should learn from that we can always find ways to do the right thing.

there are quite a few typos and mistakes

since birth I have quite become---- since birth I have become quite

amased -- amazed

vender.--vendor

The that attracted me was ----What attracted me was

please go through the item in detail there are a few more errors that need to be corrected.

Thanks a lot for sharing the item, had fun reading it.

regards
bas

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Review of TheLetter  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi that is a very touching story. And very well written too.
The ending is very good, a very practical ans sensible one.

just one suggestion when the letters end indicate it by some thing may be *** or some thing like that. it gets a little confusing other wise. i guess you have put the ** * but one para before the letters end.

thanks for sharing the item.

it was fun reading it

bas

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Review of The Cassette Tape  
Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi that is a very interesting story. Keeps the interest of the reader right till the end.
enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing the item.

regards
bas.
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Review of Explanation  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi that is a very informative item. I think it would be more appropriate if you put it under the articles rather than short stories.

Thanks for sharing the item.

bas.

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Review of Blind To Love  
Review by bas
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi that is a very interesting story.
The imagination is really good and very well described too.
Its nice to see how even the most powerful can be so vulnerable when they fall in love. *Smile*

Enjoyed reading the item, thanks for sharing it.

regards
bas

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Review by bas
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
hi that is an interesting horror tale. The actions and scene are described well.

A few errors
They was his knives---- They were his knives
The blades slide into--- The blades slid into

you sure can think of extending the story further into a longer version, it has nice plot.

Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.

regards
bas

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Review by bas
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi that is a well written item. But seems to leave a lot of things for reader to imagine. Why did Trevor leave why did he come back etc. Gives a feeling of incomplete story, just my thoughts.

The emotions have been shown well.

enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing the item.

Regards
bas
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Review by bas
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
hi that is interestingly written but i felt it lacks some clarity. I mean who is calling what purpose etc , may be a little difficult to put all the information in 55 words but i guess that is the challenge *Smile*.

enjoyed reading the item, thanks for sharing it

regards
bas
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Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi that is a very well written item. don't think there is any thing missing.

May be you can consider adding one or two incidents that you have witnessed or been a part of which has made your belief of angels on earth stronger. Just my thought.

thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it

regards
bas
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Review by bas
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
That sure is an interesting way to start feeling better *Smile*. The item is well written with good use of words.

Thanks for sharing the item. Enjoyed reading it

regards
bas.

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Review of Breaking out  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi that is a very good article. I too firmly believe that everyone is responsible for their destinies and can achieve whatever they want if they work with full faith.

There is one mistake i think....
we are about breaking out---i guess you wanted to say -- we are talking about breaking out


Enjoyed reading the item, thanks for sharing it.

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Review of Meant To Be  
Review by bas
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi that is an intersting item.
But I did not understand the ending, what does it mean ?
i feel you can build further on the story.

Thanks for sharing the item,enjoyed reading it.

regards
bas

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