Dear Seuzz,
I felt I hit had the jackpot after reading your story--the first submission I selected after joining this site yesterday.
The title, blurb, and visual *and the "sweetheart's name) were all great clues for the discerning reader; compliments for allowing your readers use of their imaginations in this cleverly written story. I could picture our protagonist picking up the sweetarts, one by one from the candy bowl, and talking to himself in his apartment.
With this idea in my mind, the ending didn't square for me. I imagined our protagonist, hearing police sirens, going to the window and congratulating himself because he believes neither the body he buried nor the shovel he had disposed of will ever be found.
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