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Review by Cassie
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very good and clever!
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Review of My Walk  
Review by Cassie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good poem. The first few lines I feel you could space them differently, but thats my opinion. (my style is very odd) For example if I was writing this I would change:

I felt the sun on my skin

I felt the chill in the air


to:

I felt the sun,

on my skin.

I felt the chill,

in the air.

Or i don't know. You can change it like that if you want, I don't mind. But I see potential in your writing! =)

-Cassie
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