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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hey! I’m new here so forgive me for not knowing reviewing etiquette. I like the set up here it’s a tried and true way to start a monster attack. I’d like to suggest, if you haven’t already, being more descriptive about the blob. How did Rebecca find this thing? Did she turn a tight corner and see it, did it come out of a grate leading to the sewers below her? Also the blob it self should be described more maybe its viscosity or movement patterns. Just calling it “the blob” leads to repetition. Otherwise I like the blob set up and will keep reading.
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