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Review of Rescue Me  
Review by bonrose68
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent poem! Very nicely written and so endearing. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for the great read!
Happy Writing!
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Review by bonrose68
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Overall, this appears to be a great love story. I found a few mistakes you may want to look into though.
In the prologue: about 5 paragraphs down. (we ran until they made it safely inside) could perhaps be , we ran until we safely made it inside, or we ran until we made it safely inside. Also, Chapter 1: about 4 paragraphs down. ( black dresswhich ) nothing major just might want to add a space in between dress and which. And finally on about the 6th paragraph, I noticed ... ( H wanted to see ) wasn't sure if H was an abbreviation or not. I don't mean to be overly critical, I only want to point out the things I noticed. As I would hope anyone would do for me as well. I think you have a great book ahead of you, good luck and Happy writing!
Bonnie
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Review by bonrose68
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow! Now thats what I call detailed information. Almosts makes me wish I was nursing, so I can try the project myself. Nicely done. Of course I am a bit speechless. I never in my wildest dreams imagined I would read about the construction of a bra. I would like to say though if the subject moves you, go for it!
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