Hey, i hope ur in the best of health, this poem is about a child being born, or am i mistaken? Well its a free verse and an entertainig one too, but maybe u could tidy it up a bit, make lines have closer lengths? This is just a suggestion, only u knw wats right for ur writing, all in all a nice poem, take care and plz visit me at my port., Bunni xx
Hey Rixy,
amazing story, omg what a silly little women she was! very well written and imaginative, plz write more of these.. can u call this arony? well anyways this is one of the best stories i read in WDC ... honest .. check out my port. .. take care, Bunni xx
awww ... a 100% rhyme poem! very sweet and well written ... i love how u ended the piece ... it shows ur true love 4 ur family ! God Bless u all ... Bunni xx
Yo Jan! ... again you threw rhyme and free verse in the blender and pressed on! the result a very emotional and sweet poem from the heart to the heart !! continue to shine, Bunni xx
hey .. L&L ... well for starters ur end shocked me there ... and u knw ... here at WDC nobody's alone ... and noboby's lost ... we writers look out 4 eachother ... we're all one big (and i mean BIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIG) family... very emotional poem ... keep writing and feel free 2 visiting me @ my port. !! take care and good luck, Bunni xx
As promised i visited and may i say i didn't regret it !! this poem is well titled, written and construsted ... mostly a free verse but still worth the read ... you have a wonderful day now .. and keep writing
H,
this was a good read ... the end was surprising ... i didn't expect Tarzan to be in what seemed like a city ... which ,in this writer's opinion, made it all better ... continue writing and Good Luck, Happy thanksgiving... Bunni
P.S. feel free to visit me @ my port. reviews and ratings are always welcome ..
P.p.s. thank u 4 allowing me 2 review and rate ur writing ... i consider it an hounour and priviledge
Lol ... Hey B... this is funny ... its like ur talking yourself but at the same time taliking to your story and characters AND at the same time talking to US!! lol ... was really worth my time ... keep these coming !! thank you for allowing me to review your work.. take care and have an awsome day.. happy thanksgiving, Bunni
P.S. please visit my port. .... reviews and ratings are always welcome .. thank you!
A Superb poem that is from the heart to the heart ... it has no grammatical or spelling mistakes, the rhyme and rhythm are fantastic and the flow in continuous ... Keep writing and have a great thnksgiving ... God bless! take care and have fun, Bunni xx
OhMy!! this is a sad little piece.. made my eyes tear up! very well written, and even tho its on the short side.. it beholds greater emotion than most longer poems ... beautiful.. God Bless! bunni
Hello S!! not only is this a great way to meet other members .. but an even better way to improve ur writing, reading, and just -well- socialize... so a 5 star rate to a 5 star new friend!! umm.. am i suppose 2 introduce myself now? well, my name is BunzBlabz (yeah thats my name :P) .. or just plain Bunni .. i mainly write poems but am thinking of branching out to short stories.. i absolutly loooooooooooooooooooooooooove anything pink .. and my latest addiction is WDC... and McDonald's french fries!! Mmmm .... i am also a highschooler .. yup.. that's all about me! Now it's ur turn!
P.S. pweeez visit me @ my portfolio and check out my writings ..
Heeey again .. (yeah ur probably bored 4m me now lol).. this poem is very well written and i could just feel ur love 4 ur sons! it is so strong that its visible and solid.. i wish i can be to my mother exactly what they r 2 u .. God Bless you all !! thank you..
OhMyGod!!!WoW!!! this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping ... it shows how life .. truely is unfair .. and will never be.. this poem has enlightened me to how fotunate i am ... and it spoke directly to my heart while my brain struggled to make sense of it ... it is perfect .. in everyway .. just amazing .. and so emotionally stirring .. i loved it ... absolutly loved it .. u hang in there ... and God blessed u by giving u such a wonderful ability to write so well and capture so many hearts and people ... Keep writing and have a fantastic day ... Love, Bunni xx
Dear J, Hellooooo !! this is a lovely peom !! so emotional, so deep, my heart reaches out 2 u and ur daughter may God bless u both ! ... the poem is well written, i couldn't detect any mistakes and i love the continuity of the poem and how it captures ur heart and talks to it alone.. thanx 4 posting this and keep these coming!!
Hey Luna .. well, hunn, i can tell ur having a hard time and ur words are full of emotion ... i loved it and am sure many can relate to this peom !! ... anyhow, it is well written ... but a little on the short side tho ... please feel free to read my poem (What Being a Mother Means) i would love to hear ur thoughts and suggestions ... Good Job and Good Luck + keep these poems coming ...
Hola, BSholl!! OMG!! i love this story .. so devious .. reminds me of my friends lol .. its fun and cute .. plus has a moral ... keep these coming!!
Sincerely,
the newbie Mee ... a.k.a Bunni xx
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... the poem is well written, i couldn't detect any mistakes and i love the continuity of the poem and how it captures ur heart and talks to it alone.. thanx 4 posting this and keep these coming!!