Dear Marcus,
Hello there I've read your poem found no errors. I actually thought it was a very deep piece.
These are questions and situations people often find themselves in. You took the emotion and soaked your ink in it as the flow of intensity thru visual emotion is seen here.I really enjoyed reading you piece and felt I could relate as I think many can.Good job .Happy Holidays.
Dear strlcuckoo (32),
I have read your poem and am here to offer my opinion.I love when intensity can be found in short poems a few lines.When an author can emotionally capture you.Well guess what for me you have done just that.Sometimes it is too hard too let go so we hang on .Often we don't remember the bad or hard times for in our minds eye we choose to cherish the good moments.Great job found no errors thank you for sharing great job.
Dear Light,
I found your piece moving as it details the struggle we must often face I think I Strive On would be a good title as it seems in this poem that is the most important message.I liked how the emotion was intense and real in your poem.Your words rang true for what so many of us go through.I have no criticism to give as I really enjoyed reading this thank you for sharing happy holidays. I've enclosed some gift points from the Dream Team Again thank you.
Dear Thick Ink,
I see through reading your piece the intense emotion that displays mistrust.The words used in your piece gave it more vindictive intense visual emotion.Your grammar I found no errors but by the way you write I'd say your a pro.The visual helps your readers to understand what emotion you are trying to put into focus.My favorite line "Crooks hide their faces behind honest men".Wow hammer meet nail you nailed this on the head.I enjoyed reading your piece very much and think you did a superb job.
Dear J.A. Stevens,
First off I am here to offer my opinions and they are only my views.I find fantasy a much more difficult task then real life poetry because imaginary is very important and you my friend are very imaginative.Your words are expressive and speak first hand lol its as though you are the wings soaring yourself.I found no grammatical errors and found your words flowed together with such ease an altogether good read thank you for sharing.
Dear KayDeWhitt,
Wow don't mean to sound crazy but I found myself sobbing when I read this piece I myself had a child pass away and it's a pain and love we feel always.You words spoke exactly as though from a mothers heart and soul it's our children that make us whole.This is an amazing piece because of the love the sorrow the hope the strength behind it.
Hello Crazy Writer,
I always believe that if someone can make another feel emotion or visually produce to readers then the piece is amazing .Your piece is amazing.Twelve lines wow twelve small but too the point lines open your readers up your piece is great job well done.
I have read your item and am here to review it. Please remember this is only my opinion and not necessarily anyone elses. Take what works for you and disregard the rest.
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What I liked:How you used your words to describe your love the passion in the poem was clear from the first two lines.You expressive wording made this clearly an A++ in my book.Congrats job well done.
What might need editing:I found no errors.
Personal Comments: I enjoyed reading this thank you for sharing.
The similes are well used as are the metaphors, but might I suggest a little line spacing and capitalization on new sentences.Otherwise I think you expressed yourself clearly emotionally and visually.
Hi Mare,
Please note that these are only my opinions. Use whatever works for you and ignore the rest.
Title:It is appropriate fitting.
FORMAT: I would suggest maybe spreading it out a bit break down the sentences to give it more length.
FLOW: Your writing was very clear easy to understand.
TENSION/CONFLICT: You can feel the emotions of loneliness seeping thru this poem.
DIALOGUE: Is very well written.
SETTINGS & DESCRIPTIONS: The visual makes you picture yourself there and your words the emotion behind them make you feel what the trucker is feeling.
GRAMMAR, SPELLING, PUNCTUATION: N/A
ADDITIONAL THOUGHTS: In a few short lines you nailed visual emotion through the expression of your words a job well done.
I have read your item and am here to review it Please remember this is only what I noticed and not necessarily anyone elses. Take what works for you.
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What I liked:Family the title the meaning of what it is to you
What might need editing: Maybe the format could be rearranged as some sentences seem to run on for couple lines
Title: This is appropriate
FORMAT: . You might use a little line spacing between sentences/verses
FLOW: The flow was perfect you don't loose your readers
TENSION/CONFLICT: I love how the more it went on the tension built as you described your emotions
DIALOGUE: The dialogue was written well it sounds very natural
SETTINGS & DESCRIPTIONS: I felt as though I was there and you were describing this to me
GRAMMAR, SPELLING, PUNCTUATION: Found this needed no improvement
ADDITIONAL THOUGHTS: Thank you so much for sharing it is tru about family and our natural need for it job well done congrats
I have read your item and am here to review it Please remember this is only what I noticed and not necessarily anyone else's. Take what works for you.
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What I liked:You wrote of the Christmas spirit and the true joy behind it.
What might need editing:Nothing flows perfectly
Personal Comments:I enjoyed reading this.
Title: This title is perfect
FLOW: I thought this piece flowed very nicely from one point to the next follow thru was captioned great
TENSION/CONFLICT: I love how as the poem went on it showed the deeper and deeper meaning for Christmas.
DIALOGUE: The dialogue seems very &sounds natural.
SETTINGS & DESCRIPTIONS: There was good imagery It made me feel like I was there and I could imagine envision what was happening.
GRAMMAR, SPELLING, PUNCTUATION: I thought the grammar was perfect I found no errors.
Thank you so much for sharing this piece perfect for this time of year.
You can actually visualize the writers emotion when writing a piece like this and haven't we all felt this way before.words capture emotion and you for sure did this with your piece. Your piece was a lovely read and thank you for sharing with me good luck.
This was beyond amazing omg seriously i have goosebumps all over the similes the intense emotion wow you are an amazing writer and this piece makes you feel as though your living in it wow this is amazing i have nothing negative to say because you wow keep writing your a natural its astounding how another words story can touch you like this piece can amazing good job
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