I love this poem. I too think that eyes tells the story. Very well written with good flow and content.
Thanks so much for sharing with us and Write-On.
This poem is a wonderful tribute to Anne Frank. She was not only brave but she was also a hero. Your poem does justice to her cause.
Only one suggestion, watch out for typo "wnat" should be "want" and the 6th stanza did not flow as well as the rest for me. You may want to revist that stanza for the flow of your poem. But if you are comfortable with it then that is all that counts.
Otherwise it is an awesome poem. Thanks for sharing with us and Write On.
Thank you so much for this wonderful poem about death. I too see death as another realm of life. This poem is very beautifully written with good flow and content. I know that the message in it will reach others and bring comfort to them regarding the subject. Write-on.
This is an amazing poem that certainly has an awesome message. The flow and content is good. The overall message is one that will change people lives for the good. Thanks so much for sharing this awesome poem with us. Write-On.
This is an amazingly beautiful prayer/poem. I love the words, flow and the peace it leaves you with after the reading. I have read a lot of your work and each reading takes me away. Keep up the good "words" that blesses others life. Write-On
I like the message from this story. The flow and description was written well in the story. It held my interest from beginning to end and left me wanting to read more. Great message. Thanks for sharing with us and Write-On.
This was an incredible story! I really enjoyed it. The story held my interest from beginning to the end and I really liked the twist at the end "the garlic scene". Good flow and contents. Well written. Thanks for sharing with us. Write On.
My sentiments exactly. This is my prayer and wish. Thank you so much for putting it in these beautiful words. Very well written, awesome contents and I am sure this piece will change people lives for the good. Good message. God Bless. Write-On.
The content and flow of this story is good. I think your ratings are low because there are typo's and a lot of punctuation that needs to be corrected. Once you have taken care of those things, your rating on this particular piece should improve. I can certainly relate to the story because, I experienced the same emotions you related in your story. I look forward to reading more of your material. Write-On.
This is awesome. I was browing on the site and stumpled upon this wonderful piece of your creative art. I will definitely use in the future. Thanks for sharing.
This poem started off great and then at the end it lost me (something is missing). I think it is a good poem, but it leaves me with the feeling that it wasn't finished. Maybe it's me...Have you thought of adding something to the end..
What a wonderful tribute to your daughter. I lost a daughter at 8 months old and can relate. This poem said everything that I feel about my daughter. Very well written. No suggestions needed, flow and contents are perfect. Thank for sharing.
You have good poetry, but I found that it was too much to read on one page. Have you thought about posting them individually, then one can meditate on each of them separate. I especially liked "Time" and that is what my review is on. Thanks for sharing with us. Write-on.
TyKam
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