I like this :) I suggest reading through it once or twice more, I found a few typos that can be easily fixed. Other than that, it's good work! I'll keep an eye out for when you post more!
I really like what you did with this. It kept my attention and was well written. I'd suggest rereading it a time or two. I found a few grammatical errors that can be fixed by simply making something plural. The only other note that I'd like to make is be careful of present tense versus past tense. There were a few instances where you flipped between the two, although you focused on past tense the majority of the piece. If you'd like, when I have more time I can do a grammatical write up on this, and send it back to you with what I found. Just let me know if you're interested! :)
This piece of work touched me. I'm sorry for the loss that you have experienced, but I am glad that you shared this with us. It's beautifully written, and I personally don't think you should take it down. I'm glad that you can still look back on the good memories, not many people can do that. This piece of work though is inspiring. Although it may not be something you'd like to do, it sounds like a lifetime that would be good to see on paper. Its just a thought, and I completely understand if you wouldn't like to do it, but it may also help to put all of the memories down on paper in detail, to relive them in a way.
Anyways, point being, I don't think you should take it down, I liked this very much :)
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