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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found solid advice in this story. The problem with me is laziness in my writng endeavor.
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Review of Gandul  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A good story about acting as a sloth and fairly written.. And I would like to know what was his ailment? This story reminded me when I was a bachelor a long long time ago but in my case the computer wasn't available.
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Review of Second Chance  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wel written story with excellent dialogue.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A well-written story with a sad ending. As for life having reasons or meanings to exist, does not bode well with me. In life things just happen without rhyme or reason. We as human beings adapt to life not the other way around. It is true, "...That life is designed to focus on the good." If it were not we would truly be in hell.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The writer gave plenty of information in the assessment of pain. Through the years, starting in October, 1994 to April, 2005, I have visted the emergency room 8 times with fluid retention in my lungs, due to congestive heart failure. I had extreme breathing problems coupled with pain. On each visit I demanded of a doctor to give me drugs that would ease my breathing and my pain, which he did. I know a lot about pain and have taken every pain killing drug imaginable and never once became addicted. Pain will never interfere with my body because if I get any pain for a few hours, I'll be heading to the nearest ER.
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Review of A Modest Proposal  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed the story and it was well-written.
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Review of The Free Fall  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
This a good story about facing one's fear and Ponita with your actions encouraged others to take the Free Fall ride. The truth about fear is mind over matter not matter over mind. To me life is more exciting and thrilling, when I face any fear and conquer it. The story was well-written.
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Review of My Romeo  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This story, written in good prose with few misspellings, turns my stomach. Because the writer compares Romeo and Juliet (who aren't criminals), to misfortunate lovers. Integrity and logic trumps love everytime. However, that's true, only when one acquires wisdom as one ages.
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Review of Little Ships  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A great war story that I enjoyed reading. Well-written and your desciprtion of the action was easy to follow. Is the story true? The many French words you wrote were not translated into English, which left me in a lurch.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poll question.but my category isn't listed. Because when I write I know exactly where my voice is and the voice of others, at any level. The only issue is, do I write with clarity? Furthermore, I have never had writer's block. But I must, to reach my goal of completing my memoir, allot time and finish the darn thing.
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Review of THE LAST SWALLOW  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
A well-written story.I enjoyed your vivid description of nature in its fury. Your ending is an apt example of nature's pecking order.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
A violent story that should be a lesson to all juveniles who behave violently without sufficient provocation. And to add insult to injury and with the help of a slanted article in a newspaper, reported the boy was struck by a pooper scooper. The ending was unbelievable. How can anyone injured so seriously become friends with the attacker?
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Review of Deal with it?  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.0)
A well-written story but to look back as an abuser or victim of abuse, is dangerous for one's mental health. It is better to live for the future because nothing can be undone of one's pass. If one dwells in the pass and can't handle it, one should seek mental therapy. This story also remains me of an old axiom: survival of the fittest.
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Review of Second Chance  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't ordinarily read love stories but this one kept me riveted. It was well wrtten and the words used made for smoothly flowing reading, while expressing all emotions and setting the mood and the scene.
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Review of Within the Ashes  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Is this story referring to the Grim Reaper? The story was written-well but in my humble opinion the subject matter is unclear. For death conquers us all and those who have die do not return. In addition, as fanciful has your interpretation of the purpose of life is, it does not provide an answer. Moreover, humans are classified as animals. An analogy I can attribute to your story comes during the end of WWII of the Manhattan Project. When upon exploding an atomic bomb, Dr. Oppenheimer said the unforgettable phase, ' I have become death."
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Review of Four  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Well written and your use of imagery crystal clear. The ending could be positive by the four showing mercy but you decided to make them worst than the remaining villagers.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A well written piece of fiction with a lot of violence. And yes, there is good and evil, life and death but there is also gray areas.
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Review of The Wager.  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nicely written but no lesson learned here. The man with money problems needed that twenty dollar bill more than the angel who fooled him.
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Review of Flashpoint  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.5)
A nicely written story about memories but like the old saying goes when one growns-up, "One can never go back home'.
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Review of The Trial  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.0)
A well written story. But after 36 years with Becky, George should have grown a spine.
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Review of Folgers Falls  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (4.0)
As the saying goes, "Turnabout is fair play." I hope Mark learned his lesson. Your story reminded me of the many-- "Marks'--I have known. Nicely written and funny.
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Review of Old Glory  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+
The story is very heartwarming and poignant. It is descriptive and well written. I found it strange that one could use humor in combat. From my experience, there is no humor in combat. But after the fighting, composure reassert itself allowing humor to be used.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A very sad story, indeed. But well written. Furthermore, there comes a time when humans outlive their purpose in life and their deaths is what a awaits.
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Review of The Changeling  
Review by Sanchez
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A well written story with detailed descriptions of characters. I enjoyed reading it especially the ending.
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Review by Sanchez
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for your tips about writing and editing. As I write my manuscript, I find myself actually editing it at the same time. Another tip I received from a WDC newletter-- read aloud what I have written, to find out if it makes any sense and has a smooth continuity.
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