- This article provided the most important aspects of Ramadan, and many will be educated by it.
- The way this was written was very good, I didn't find any mispelled words, or any grammatical error.
- You have also discussed "fasting", which is I think the heart and soul of the Ramadan. I had a better knowledge of your practices just by reding this.
- You provided a link of one of your other pieces that provides better details about Ramadan, and I think that's great because this article seemed a little too short
Negative
- None really!
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I liked how this article provided information about your practices, and you wrote this without seeming to convert or force others into Islam. You just wanted to seem to share, and I think that that's great.
This folder is a good idea for advertising your most recent items and the ones you would like to be reviewed first. Placing this folder at the top of your port will definitely get readers to check this out first... and that's cool.
I found the items on this folder very informative, too. I would only suggest that you arrange the items by types (articles next to articles, stories next to stories). It isn't really necessary but I do suggest it if you want more organization.
This is some trophy case! I think the awards you received from this pieces are well-deserved. I hope you will be adding a lot more to this folder in the future!
My favorite item in this folder is the WdC photo album.. such a creative idea. I would definitely be checking out each and every person's pics in there
I so understand how you feel. I can imagine the confusion, the guilt, and the emotional exhaustion. You were good in expressing those feelings with your every word, and this piece got me hooked right from the start. I will be reading on with it's continuation
I so understand how you feel. I can imagine the confusion, the guilt, and the emotional exhaustion. You were good in expressing those feelings with your every word, and this piece got me hooked right from the start. I will be reading on with it's continuation
Thanks for sharing this poem with us. I thought that this was beautifully crafted. I loved the description, and the way you put the words together made me really feel, as if I was experiencing the very scenes you were describing.
I also loved how it ended; I guess you surprised me there.
Thanks for sharing this with us. This was a very emotional piece for me, and I hope everything turned out all right with your family. I really hope you find him.
What I liked most about your poem was how simple it was; yet very meaningful. Only I thought that "allright" should be "all right" or "alright" in line six. Just a simple suggestion.
First off let me say thanks for sharing this with us. What I liked about this was how you used words to amazingly describe the dreaded holiday let's just say you painted a very vivid picture in my mind. What I didn't like about it was how gloomy or whiny it seemed- I mean, if you don't like the day then don't participate in it but don't take it out on others who do enjoy it. Though I'm sure you were only trying to express the main message of your poem, and with it's flow and use of words, this piece is very good.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. This is such an emotional piece and I felt that you have done justice to others who felt this way by writing it. Your use of words were swell- I wasn't thrown off or confused at any time while reading it. I think you expressed your views and emotions very clearly.
Typos:
[i}THis Daddy brings his work day home And respond to all the sacrafice
Let me tell you what I liked about it. The way you used words and the way you told the story painted a very vivid picture in my mind. The character was also very likeable- he didn't give up until the last second.
What I didn't like about it was how it ended. See, I'm a sucker for happy endings and so you can just imagine my disappointment that the old man did not make it. It seemed so unfair after everything he went through.
As for spelling and grammar, you were fanstastic.
God bless!
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let's just say you painted a very vivid picture in my mind. What I didn't like about it was how gloomy or whiny it seemed- I mean, if you don't like the day then don't participate in it but don't take it out on others who do enjoy it. Though I'm sure you were only trying to express the main message of your poem, and with it's flow and use of words, this piece is very good.