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Hello Scarlett!
I have read "Invalid Item"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: This started off looking like one of my free writes, so I was instantly hooked. The parts about smoking, I could totally relate to, since I used to smoke not too long ago.


What I liked most: The stlye it was written. I liked that this was written trying to pass some time.


Suggestion:Don't let those anonymous reviewers get to ya. They just don't know what's good. That's probably why it's anonymous.






Write on,

Jenny

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Hello rampartace!
I have read "Gaming for the Win!"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: Having a love for video games myself, I couldn't wait to see your viewpoint.


What I liked most: I liked how you went through every possible "bad" thing about video games. I've always said that it's great for hand eye cordination. However, I hate the wii though. Hate it. Like the games, but if I want to jump around I'd break out the power pad.





Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling::you said the word relives a couple of times. That means to live again. I think you meant relieves.
Then this sentence Or have or friends play too and destroy them instead! just does'n sound right. Try re-wording it.





Write on,

Jenny

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Hello Hyperiongate!
I have read "Last Gift"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: I thought it was a bit strange that a reindeer was walking down the hallway. Actually, I thought he fell from the roof or something.


What I liked most:This was a great story. Very touching and I'm sure it would brighten a kid's day. Well, especially if it was a kid in the hospital.






Write on,

Jenny

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Hello Xander! I have read "the most interesting thing in my life."  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: Right from the start, it was poorly executed with one long run on sentence. Interesting story though.




Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling: This entire thing has errors all through it. For example: I think its the most ridiculous question that can be asked, it was once asked to a young man not to long ago his response,he was sexually assualted by his priest when he was just about the age of 8, now he's a homophile. On the other hand the same question was asked to a priest his response ,he molested a young boy,he puts hands on his head as he recalled his first time, he was scared and uncertain but his fear was replaced by a hunger for more.Her eyes filled with tears and i could sense her pain as her body sagged as she speaked, she ignored the signs,or was it that she This is just the first paragraph. The first sentence is a huge run on. Take out some of those comas and place them with periods. Therefore capitolizing the next letter. It's beter if you spell out the number. You need to capitolize the letter I when reffering to yourself.






Suggestion: re-do this and take your time.






Write on,

Jenny

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Hello Beck! I have read "Santa Speaks"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: I was wondering what you did with the prompt for the contst. As I started to read I was amused.


What I liked most: The whole thing. The ending was great. I entered this contest this round. If you don't win though, I will be surprised. You deserve it.






Write on,

Jenny

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Hello Jace!
I have read "The Streak"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: I would have loved to participate in something like that. Take off my and run around in some place public and not get in trouble? You bet!


What I liked most:I thought the very end is what wrapped it up nicely. Well, nicely for a read. Not for that guy that no one helped.





Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:I thought everything was just fine. Great stuff.



Write on,

Jenny