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I look to be entertained, informed, and connected in some way. It may be wrong but if the first few lines or paragraphs don't hook me in some way, I will leave without even reading the rest. Also, I will notify you if I run into errors.
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I do not mean to toot my own horn but I am awesome at limericks. I've helped so many people with limericks. I've even thought about opening up a class here on limericks.
Favorite Genres
In no particular order: humor, horror, biography. I'll read any genre but those are my main favorites!
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not sure. Maybe legal or finance but if done in the right voice, even that can be good.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, bios, essays,fiction, and nonfiction
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pros, books
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Something that is LONG like 100 kbs or something. I will only review long pieces if someone requests it of me but nothing that's 100 kb. Let's not get crazy or anything.
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ben,

I have read "Mistaken All Week?"  and I'd like to share my thoughts.

This was fantastic. Well, I wasn't surprised since I have never been dissapointed reading anything by you. I loved all the styles of poetry and I didn't see one mistake.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Judy,

I have read "Things Leukemia Has Taught Me"  and I offer you my feedback.

First, I'd like to get the technical things out of the way. This was written perfecty and had no mistakes.

This was very well written and it made me see this through your eyes. Sorry to hear that you have this disease. I only knew of kids to have it. The oldest I knew of that had it, was a cheerleader in high school. She was the only person that was allowed to wear a hat to school, since she had no hair. She wore a white baseball cap with a fake flower at the bottom of it. Sadly, she died at the end of that school year. I never personally knew her, but she was always so nice and bubbly from what I saw. Guess this story of yours reminds me of her though I didn't really know her. Just thought I'd share.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review of Dark or Light  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Gohst,

I chose horror. I think that you should include a few more options though. That is just what I think. You don't have to change a thing if you don't want.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review of More Lysol!  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Ben,

I want you to know this was so good that I read it twice. The rhyme was flawless. The rhythm was perfect. Best of all, the topic was both humorous and dark. A great combination in my opinion.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Stallion,

I only knew of Hussein on that list, so I voted him. I think maybe more options should have been given. That's just my opinion though. You did have the option "other" which should cover everything.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Robin!

I have read "Lift Your Blinds..."  and I offer you these suggestions.



What I liked most: I liked that it spoke about these ignorances. I'm "white" and I don't understand how people could be like this. For centuries. It also flowed and rhymed awesomly.


Overall impression: I that that it was just perfect.




Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello BlueSkye!

I have read "Review of Living Dead Girl"  and I offer you these suggestions.

First impression: I was curious what the song meant. Just because I like it, doesn't mean I knew what it meant. I don't even know what half the songs I like mean. (even if I know all the words)


What I liked most: That I could actually hear the song as I read the lyrics. And that it was very informative, going line by line of the song. Now I know what that song means. (How about thunderkiss 65?)



Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Meg,

I thought that this poem was spectacular. Kudos on doing this kind of poem and having it rhyme. The syllables were perfect for the rhyme too. When I do this type of poem, I can't rhyme it. (But I would like to)

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Gabrielle! I have read "I Pledge No Allegiance"  and I give these suggestions.



What I liked most:I liked how this was written with a twist on the line from the pledge of allegiance.


Suggestion: Don't change a thing.


Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello Erk!
I have read "I Have Appendicitis"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: A father talking to his son about his illness and now the son has to be the man of the house. I'm glad to see it's fiction though.


What I liked most: I liked how it was writen. As a father talking to his son.


Suggestion:I think that since this is basically a conversation that you should have quote marks in the beginning and end. The first letter should be capitalized anyway, the doctors say that I have at most two weeks to live. well, let's just say they're not exactly 100%. I think that would look better if you spelled it out, saying a hundred percent. This goes for the other numbers in the story.

All in all, good story. With a little polishing, it will be even better.


Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Oldwarrior! I have read "I CAN SEE YOU NAKED!"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: The title is what made me read this in the first place. That was the very first impression.


What I liked most: The whole story I could relate to. Well about public speaking. Great job. I was sympathizing and relating. I couldn't pictire people naked though, because I'd end up laughing.


Suggestion: Don't change a thing. And write more!


Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Apriori!
I read {item:1475386 } and wanted to offer you this review:



Emotional Impact: This was a good attempt at a limerick, which any limerick I think is funny in its own way.



Effectiveness of Form:



Punctuation and Grammar:The syllables were just a tiny bit off. You had 8, 8, 5, 6, 9. So you had the form of aabcd. A limerick is supposed to be aabba.

*Star*Closing comments: With a little bit of work, this can be a perfect limerick.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jyo,

I saw teeth and I just knew it was from Acme's halloween contest. Great poem. It was funny, flowed smoothly, and had no errors.

Great work.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Web witc hing,

This poem was absolutlely great. I didn't see any errors and the subject matter was fantastic!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Rage Within  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello Sariah! I have read "Rage Within"  and I give these suggestions.

First impression: From the first few sentences it grabbed onto my attention and held it throughout. The more I read on, the more I couldn't believe things like these can actually happen to a person. I know that it does happen, because my best friend has gone through similar things.


What I liked most: It was written very well and I liked that you were able to share something like this.


Suggestion: I don't recall any errors.

Write on,



Jenny
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Review of Blind Date  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Lee,

*Laugh* That was great. It had me laughing out loud.

I thought the story was smooth and flawless. Great stuff!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Beware  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Emma,

Thank you for your entry. This story only had fourteen titles, when it called for at least 15.

I do hope that I will see another entry from you in the future.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello Kay!

I have read "Myrna, Dark and Light"  and I offer you these comments.


First impression: This was a piece about your mother. It started off with talking about the good things, then onto the not so good things about your mother.

What I liked best: I personally like any piece that lets me peak into the writer's life.


Suggestions: There's problems with this sentence: That is not what she got. Instead of roses and romance, she got someone who was never taken care of himself; therefore he never understood that need in someone else. Try to reword it maybe.
I also think that you should tell a little more about your mother. Like, why do you think that your mother ended up like that? Just a suggestion of course.

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Nicki!

I have read "Invalid Item"  and I offer you these suggestions.

First impression: A family sitting down to dinner with a mishap during.


What I liked most: That it was funny, although it shouldn't have been. I pictured everyoine at the table and I was laughing at you. I shouldn't have, but I just couldn't help myself. I had a sigh of relief when your son was okay and nothing like you thought would happen, happened.


Overall impression: I thought it was a funny family mishap and your daughter's last comment sort of lightened the whole situation.


Write on!

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hello Richard!
I read {item:1485465 }and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: This story was quite a different vampire story. Very unique vampire character.

What I liked: I liked that the vampire was kind of nerdy. I have never seen a kind of nerdy vampire and that was a nerdy vampire. It would have just been even better, if he tripped or something since vampires are always graceful, usually.






Suggestions: This story has a ton of grammar errors. Wrongful comma placements all throught. (Don't fret. I found out that it's a very common mistake) There's some things that needed to be questions, but had no question marks. I think that you should go back and try to correct these.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Four-Word March  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Coal,

I love things like these. Fun and a bit challenging to make sense. My favorite part is the title. Very creative!

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Greasy  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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HelloBill!
I read "Greasy" and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: The great imagery made me want to read more. I could picture everything.


What I liked: Personally, I liked that it was in first person. I don't get to see many first person pov. The story flowed smoothly and was a great read.





Suggestions: I have none.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review of Matriphobia  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Hyperiongate!
I read "Matriphobia" and I offer you you these comments.


First Impression: That the main character was doing something that he feared. I had no idea what that was until the ending.


What I liked: Events were quickly flashing in front of his eyes, as he remembered about days gone by. It semed as if he couldn't keep his mind on what was currently happening, which made him believable. I thought the ending tied nicely into the story.





Suggestions: I think maybe that more of a current setting can be mentioned. Along with the flashbacks, give a sense of "here and now". That is only my suggestion though.

*Star*

Write on,

Jenny
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Review by *Jenny*
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello SuperDiscoFunk,

This was terrific. It had great imagery. I picturedd everything well.

Write on,

Jenny

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Review of ABCs for Bands  
Review by *Jenny*
Rated: E | (4.5)
Mel,

Hey this was cool. A bit crazy but cool. Remember to take a stab at the story telling. You can get away with a lot. Contest ends next Thurs. Don't lose your mind trying to create, just have fun.

Write on,

Jen
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