Oddly enough, this synopsis somewhat lacks what the other two had. Somehow the details that go into this one, seem to lack. Maybe the initial filler from before this Saga Begins - what with Gohan having nightmare dreams of Frieza, and Chi-Chi hiring an abusive math tutor.
Gives a rather good exposing light on what I feel i a rather underrated saga in Dragon Ball Z. Better still is how the sections of the story are divided up with headers that are in ALL-CAPS. In the end, this comes off as better written than the previous attempts.
Much in the similar vein as the first one, this one goes into somewhat excruciating detail in order to get as much information into the story as possible. However unlike the beginning of the Sayain Saga, this is the initial half that picks up much more interest.
The story goes into painstaking detail. Which is almost its initial problem, as all of the little minute details are covered. It's hard to detail what the story's initial purpose is; is it meant to be a synopsis or is it meant to be a fully detailed retelling?
I have read "The Metamorphosis" by Franz Kafka twice in my lifetime; once in High School and the second in College. And I have concluded that there could not possibly be a more depressing story.
However, this interactive intrigues me; the ability to change the events of the story, and give Gregor's family some much deserved pay-back. Its an inspired idea. I look forward to seeing more chapters. I hope you stick to adding to it and inspire others to add to it as well.
A really incredibly well-written poem expressing the plight of the younger generation from the mere condescension of the elder. Something that frustrates all young people is the idea that old people THINK they know everything that's going on, that they think they know what the younger ones are going through, and most importantly that they think they know the younger people. All are wrong, and all are very offensive. For how long has it been that this generation is accused of being lazy good-for-nothings? That emotions that we feel are just a phase that will pass with time? That they could possibly understand how things are for a teen in this modern age, when honestly, the simple age they lived when they were teenagers has been utterly destroyed and replaced with this far more complicated time.
Top notch job in my opinion. Keep up the good works.
...Beautiful in every meaning of the word. I somehow wrote this in my mind last September. It was exactly how I felt. There was only one thing that gave me hope. This year is my senior year. And 8 of the 9 Hellish Months are Over. I'm almost...Free...
I commend you for your brilliant writing my friend. Every teenager - nay, every child in America should read this.
...You do know that Toph is blind right? It just doesn't seem like she would be the best choice for a GTS story. She can only tell where things are by feeling vibrations in the ground. I think she'd assume that something so small would be a mouse or something.
I'm not sure if these reviews are supposed to be for this one chapter or the whole story; but in this review, it's for the case of the latter.
When I started this story, I had an impression that it was going to simply be another stereotypical Shrunken Abused Victim story. But then I got into the story line involving Craig, and I was taken aback. The story line starting from here with the chapters written by Stuffedlion have intrigued me so. When I got to Craig and his friends beating up on Mark in the hall, I thought that it was an average story, but then I saw something that I've wanted to see from a story like this; Compassion. I love the character Mrs. Andrews and how she genuinely cares for Mark. I love how his mother and sister aren't the stereotypical sex-crazed abusive females common in stories like this. Bottom line, I believe the characters are genuine and the plot has so far remained good.
I'd think that when the school started hating him, I'd loose interest, but actually I find myself more intrigued than ever. Even if the world (Mark's school) hates him, Mark has toughed it out and can come out on top.
The storyline is so good that I hesitate adding to it to possibly mess up some already good plot-lines. But I full heatedly meant every word in this review and the writer deserves every gift point that I give.
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