Powerful, absolutely powerful. I've never read something that hit so close to home before. I envy your ability to express all those emotions into something so hard as to create a rhyming poem that is actually quite good. The only constructive cristism that I could possibly give you is that you should put the poem in a different format instead of paragraph style. It may actually prove to give an even bigger effect. My goodness, I just cannot believe how much that poem touched me. I really do envy you. I would reccomend this poem to anyone who has ever hurt like that, and probably mostly to teenage girls.
Let me just first say what an amazing writer I find you to be! Very intelligent and your word choice is just amazing. While I was reading this piece I could picture everything and see your point throughout the entire piece. You have absolutely wowed me with this piece of writing. The metaphore, using the ship, was great. It worked so perfect with your point and was good for the direction that you were going in. I look forward to reading many more of your pieces. You have inspired me to keep writing and for that I thank you most of all.
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