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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh, how I missed to read from you!
Your words still echo in my mind.
I love the power that marks your pieces. The intensity it's your signeture.
I loved the thematic all along the poem, the struture you chose and this sentence

"some powerful, deadly creature"

it's truly a good brand of the piece.

I love how you put Life and Death face to face here and you know how to use their full essence. Their not just words you use, their meanings and their parellel strengths.

"so i am hanging on
for dear life, scared to death"

As usual, very well done, very nice achievement.

I bow to you, my dear WDC friend.
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Review of Someone Like Her  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
You really got the skill to talk about heartbreaks, how to put words together and how to make them gain sense.
That is something I admire, since It's your third piece I read and over all very coesive and beautiful.
You've got your own way to finding rhyms and give them the musicality that marks your pieces in a very nice way.

Keep on!

Eva.
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Review of War of the Sunset  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Laura,

This is amazing, you should absolutly turn this into a novel.
The story is comepling, mind blowing, with your personal touch marked all over the place.
Where do I start? I feel like I have so much to say that I'll forget most of it! So, I'll try.

The main character: She's so down to earth, so powerful. And because she's so real, she's aprocheble. I can truly believe her character, her personality and I come to admire her. She's no quite a hero, but she's no vilan. She's somewhere in that gray area, and that's what I love about her. She has the most amazing strength and I think the name really fits her. You really done a great job construncting her. She as a lot in her and a lot going on for her.

Jordan: I did not see that coming. I always love a twist like this, even more when I can't predict it. I use to predict it a lot and that really anoys me. I think he is a very complex and interesting character, he can grows empathy on the reader. I actually felt sorry for him. But is a survive or die era, right? His faith was so well written and so cold, you never lost the true atmosphere of the storie. Very hard thing to do.

Storie: It's not fresh; it's the apocalipse. However, your approach IS fresh! And, to me, that is what writing really is about. To renew ideas. Give them a great and new point of view. A great base should not be renewed; the rest should. You know I love your writing style, and "War of the Sunset" is truly the reason why.
The atmosphere you stablish is amazingly dense and your shorter sentences are probably your most powerful ones. They have such energy in them. You say them so simple, so clean, so cold, that sometimes give me the chills and some other times I get a little smile. Kind of darkish.
Your resources to figures of speach, the way you say things, you make everything so much beautiful than it is. You make it more intense, darker, heavier, every feeling gets multiplide. That's one of the true jobs of a writer. You are SO there.
The detailing you use about weaponery and averages and so many more things make this piece so much more real. The begining, the setting, the all introduction of the apocalypse - the surviving theme all along - it's one of my favourite parts because the way you write it it's so primal and raw and yet you never forget you doing literature.

Make this baby grow, if you ever think on going that path!

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.0)
This piece, though small, has such an amount of feeling.
I found it very touching, very beautiful.
You're writing is very natural and balanced and it seems like it comes so easy for you.
The imagery you put into the piece it only makes it stronger and more intense. It also makes it more delicate, because the main picture are roses. As they are fresh and a natural element, the piece becomes it. It's like their perfume and the colour you mention so well are the signeture of the poem. And your own as a writer!

I quite liked it, very nice job.

Roses are one of the most precious flowers there is!

Eva.
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Review of Heartbroken  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is something really profound, relateble and deep.

A heartbreak is something we have to go trough to say our life is complete and your message really makes it better and calming.

The conclusion is great,

You've done well!

Eva.
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Review of Stay Alert  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.0)
I think these lyrics are awsome.
I can totally hear them on song, the sonority of words blow me away, the rhyming scheme is great.
The message is something very relateble, everyone has been there, you worked words really well.

My favourite part is this transition:

"Leave it before it gets worse
Call it quits before it starts to hurt"

You've done quite well, that's something I'd listen to!

Congrats,

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is really nice, I can picture it be singed.
The lyrics are very soft, with the in love and the natural fear in it involved.

"Fine, I'll admit it, babe
You get on my nerves
But I'm glad I have you forever
You're more than I could ever deserve"

This is my favourite part, it gives reality to the love isue.

Congrats

Eva
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Review of Conformity  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This piece it's pretty intense, I feel a lot of pain and hanger in it.
You use very strong and powerful words, which provides a lot of magnitude to the piece.
You've done a really good work with this and did a great thing by sharing it, because now it's out there. In this case, out here.

Keep on writing

Eva.
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Review of Farewell  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.0)
This one it's really good!
The rhyming gives to the piece a really nice rythm and the theme you write about it's really deep and strong.

I relate very much to this genre, so you've got me interested in your writing.

Go on, very nice job!

Eva.
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Review of The Wanderer  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I think this piece it's very honest.
Although you should review the first paragraph, the second one it's really good!
It is very mature, insightful and makes people think.
You have a lot in you, if you explore it better, you'll find things that you can only find when you digg it deeper.

Congrats, write on, you're on the right track!

Eva
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Something everyone polite can agree on.

Eva.
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Review of Reunion  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
The middle part is the deepest of the three, mostly the first one.
I still believe you put a lot of feeling and thought in your pieces, which makes you the talented writer that you are.

Eva.
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Review of Numb  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It's the first 5 I give since I review, I believe.
This is really powerful, I don't even know if I've got the words to feedback it.
I'm an official fan of your writing now, that's for sure.
You wrote it so raw, so intense, yet with very talent. The figures of speach you use are amazing and your writing timing it's really good.
You share with the reader just enough; enough feeling, enough detailing and your talent it's way more than enough.
This turned into a book should be an impactful story, maybe it could lose some of its intensity, since it would get bigger, but the character would grow even more on people, so it would balance things.
I really felt passioned by the all lost of innocence theme and the way you made it evolved, and your conclusion paragraphs are simply intense.
I think you have a very interesting way to explore subjects.

From a fan, not just another writer

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.5)
Gosh, this one blew me away!
The sonority of the poem it's flowy and the words lock the reader in.
I felt absorved by the piece and devoured by:

"the gentler moon waits in daylight,
A silver ghost begging for darkness
(...)
Always only half alive, half herself
and half of something else"

Mostly yhis last two contain so much and represent so much, that made me shiver.
I quite like it, your a great writer.

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This piece is really great!
This is the perfect metaphor and the Block every writer's demon for lack of inspiration. Everyone's been there! Which means EVERYONE in the community sure recognises the Block. I've seen him quite a lot, actually.
This piece has a mix of atmospheres, which make it very interesting:

It has the nostalgia and the calmary of the begining;

It has the supernatural, the demons and the fears involved in those;

It has laughter and amusement.

I enjoyed the ending so much, it was unexpected, although it should be!

Congrats on this one,

Eva.
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Review of In His Eyes  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
These is something everyone who has been in love can understand.
It's really soft, very romantic I was caught up by the last verse - really lovely way to end the poem.
It's a light up theme, very approcheable and perfect to be inside a love story.
It's not the strongest you've written, but I believe it's so beautiful and I can see myself reading it under a tree, with a lot of sun and jus a little bit of a breeze...

I'm there!

Really like your work and your writing

Eva.
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Review of Barren  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
I think the piece truly comes alive in the end, because of the strength the words acquire on the last verses.
It's a very easy imagery to picture and it contains a different intensity from other pieces I read from you.
It's a versatil thing, very personal and it's a different kind of pain. It's like you made the reader feel it, but still not go all tight up and tears down about it. The final brings up a bit of hope even though there is solitute.

It's quite nice.

Eva.
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Review of AIDS Prayer  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.0)
I think this is so important, this message is really a big one.
People will eventually see and learn to deal with this and other diseases.
I hope I learn to.
You did a pretty big thing by posting this, even if it's small. You talked what was needed, and that's the precious about it.

You should encourage and not be still.

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
These is so good.
The storie is compeling, the main character it's incredible.
My kind of story, completely.
It's amazing how much power and density you invested in such a short storie. It's easy to read and you want to find out how it ends.
I must say the end it's not disappointing. The approach you chose it's one of the most appealings to me.
The atmosphere ithe storie sends to the reader it's intense and you got me right on this sentence: "You have the face of heaven, my dear, and the eyes of hell."
I'm a fan of the Eternal kind.

Eva.
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Review of Lost  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.5)
You have a pretty good start, it moves a person to want to read it all.
Really nice rhyming, really like the feeling all along the lyric.

Eva.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.0)
This piece is something everyone can relate to, wich is a positive about it.
It's very sincere, very clean, so it's easy to understand and allow the reader to feel a little.
The last four verses are the very best ones.

Keep on writing.

Eva.
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Review of love in the dunes  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like your others better, but this one have strong eyelights aswell.
I liked this one so much:

"and then, just then, of course, all sand and sweat and spent breath,
the sound of the first of the big breakers,
over my shoulder;"

I can't help to be surprised with the amount of feeling you have inside and your vision towards things.

Eva.
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Review of Perfect Lilacs  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.5)
One of my favourites!
There are some sentences which I read over and over, so I could imprint them in my mind.
So much strenght in soft little words.
I too can still smell lilacs, now.
You created a really good mix of images. The innocence, the purity the serenity of flowers, the sunlight, and then the presence of solitute and death. The silence for me is the most important; 'cause it can be pure and, at the same time, unsettling. It's like the previous two images gave birth to it.

Eva.
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Review of losing sight  
Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.5)
"beneath the water
where sound cannot reach,
the skin, and the bones
know each other;
and they swim in the light
not in the air."

So beautiful. I almost feel in love by someone, just by reading it.
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Review by Eva Duarte
Rated: E | (4.0)
This one is a great life lesson. There's a few rules we all should learn how to follow.
I love the last four verses. In them, it's where all the secrets of the poem relay. All the moral, all the strength, when mostly everything learned finally makes sense.


"it didn't help, one bit, my heart still stopped"


Eva.
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