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Review of Hey Guys  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,
Well, if I was the man I'd have pointed out about the spaghetti in her hair. I wonder how I'd reacted if someone proposed to me that way. This one really made me laugh. Girls always care about the ring only? Nothing else? Well no idea, as I don't have experience.
Keep writing!

Reviewed for "a very Wodehouse challenge" 


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Review of Letters to L  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

This is why I'm reviewing you:

You have just been made an editor of a brand new magazine! However, you need to feature five great male-related items for its first issue.
Browse through Writing.com and select those five items.
Leave a review (for each item) letting them know they've been selected for your magazine. Make it as creative as possible!

If I was made an editor of a magazine, I'd definitely pick this one. I just wish this had a rather positive ending, because the father seemed so loving, any child would be lucky to have him.
Please make the mom come back to the dad.
Keep writing!

Done for: "a very Wodehouse challenge" 


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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello,
I found your item on the review request page so came in to look through. I like the way you unfolded the story bit by bit, through the various actions and flashbacks. Is it written from personal experience? I like all the drama and suspense in here, but does it really have to end in death? As a reader, I'd have enjoyed a positive ending more, over the current one. Keep writing!

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Review of To be alive  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
hello,

I like this one, the same way I've enjoyed your other works. I didn't see any story in your port as yet. Many people overlook the simple blessings of life, this piece will help them appreciate the small, yet priceless pleasures even more. Keep writing!

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Review of Nelson's World  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi there,

this one's definitely one amusing little story, I wish I had such a smart, affectionate kitten. I like the part where Nelson has the conversation with the rabbit. I wonder how we'd react if we really could hear them talk. Dreamies? cat snack? I like the way you wrote this. Keep writing!

A review from "The Snail Mail Group"  and "Simply Positive Review Forum " 


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Review of Deadly Letter  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Koyel~writing again ,

I came humming into your port to wish you a happy anniversary. I love the drama created in here, and the imagery used. I just wondered why this serial killer killed all the people like that. All the victims seemed innocent.

“ A letter?” Jack said, surmise in his voice. I found a little typo in this sentence. Correct that, and it will be much better. And include a reason for all the slaying. Keep writing!

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Review of Drive-In Movies  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi billwilcox,

wow! that's one memorable date for sure! I'd like it better if things turned out positively for both the girl and the boy, though. This boy had a lot of unexpected fun all right, but the girl would never take home a pleasant memory after what she had experienced at the theater. I'd love to know what happened next. Keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Elle - on hiatus ,

I'm on a mission to review all the members of The Snail mail group, and I agree with you. A handwritten letter or a personal note sent to a dear one has that personal appeal which an email or facebook message will lack. But on the other hand, if there's none who can post that letter for you, (which is exactly my case), technology does help. I do have a huge pile or rather, file full of handwritten letters, handmade cards, paintings etc I got as presents since I was 10. Thanks to my snail mail friends, their cards and letters began adding to my enjoyment. I love everything I got from the group so far. Thanks for creating it.

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Review of Memories of Snow  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating ,

From today onwards, I'm gonna review my snail mail group friends. You're the first one in the list. I've read the first three entries in here, and liked all three, especially the first one. I was born in the late 80's, and even today one of my parents accompany me wherever I go. Jumping in the puddles that way, seems like a dream which will never come true. Thanks for sharing parts of your childhood with us. Keep writing!

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Review of Dear Diary  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there Wayne Foster

The title of this piece pulled me in, as I enjoy reading diary entries. The narrator seems a bit depressed, rather frustrated with life. She's a teen, so why so much of frustration? A lot more can be added to this, it can even be turned into a book. Keep writing!

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Review of Gift for Natalie  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there Charlie ~ ,

Today I decided to review all the people I'd find in my inbox. You're the first one. Here's what I thought about your story:

*Ornament2r* Title: Suits the story well, as it is all about an anniversary gift. I'd only like to know what was so special about this particular gift, which was mentioned later in the story.

*Ornament2r* Language and Layout: You've used pretty dramatic words all throughout the story, there's no word which seems too difficult to understand. The paragraphs are well spaced, and this piece looks quite neat.

*Ornament2r* Question: what exactly happened after the black fog part? I couldn't understand why the wife behaved in such a strange way.

*Ornament2r* In conclusion: This was a story with a nice twist. Keep writing!

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Review of Winged friends  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there Mina~ ,

First of all, welcome to WDC. Hope you'll enjoy the community here as much as I do. Here's what I thought about your story:

*Check3*Title: The title suits the story well, as it is about a pair of birds.

*Check3*Language and Layout: You've used pretty simple language, and the layout is also very neat. *Thumbsupr*


*Check3*Trying to help: Remember, your brief description is very important as it is the first key to attract a reader. You can try "we prefer confinement over freedom" or maybe "The cage feels better than freedom". Such indications will allow the reader to guess what the story might be about.

The tense usage could use some improvement. like: "manage" would be "managed". I did notice a few little errors like this one.

*Check3*What I liked: The part where you described the female bird being upset seems touching.

*Check3*In conclusion: This one's an interesting piece. It's an everyday event many readers can relate to. Keep writing!


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Review of Why me?  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there,
This is just so touching! I never knew girls could be so mean! If I were them, I'd have accepted the gift with gratitude, I'd never even think of being so mean. I can relate to this as I was the outcast of my class back in high school. But now, thanks to Allah, I can say I do have at least one real friend, which is very important for people of all ages. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.0)
Please enlarge these paintings a bit, for a better view *Smile*
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Review of lake at sunset  
Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is sooo beautiful! Is it your own work?
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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lynda,

You had won five reviews from me through an auction. So sorry for the delay. This poem made me smile. I'm sure many readers, especially children would love to read this. I feel sorry for the poor cat. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there,
You had won five reviews from me via an auction. So sorry for the delay. I like the talking female butterfly here. I'd like to know more about this guy she meets, and her surroundings. Love the vivid descriptions here. Add a butterfly image if you want to. Keep writing!


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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Anistasya ,

I flew in your port in search of a good read, and this is what I think about your piece. Remember, I am a writer like you, and can only offer my suggestions:

*Starb*Title: The title made me think of something dramatic, but I didn't find drama in here. What I found was a life changing experience many people can relate to.

*Starb*What I felt: This reminded me of an advice I always follow : "even if the world turns upside down, trust yourself."

*Starb*Language and Layout: I won't comment much about the language used, because heartfelt words have a flavor of their own. The layout is pretty neat, with well spaced paragraphs.

*Starb*Overall thoughts: I felt that this has the potential to become a much longer piece. What happened to the girl when she changed to a much stronger person? How did the world react again? How did it change her life? How did she move on? Keep creating!

Done for: "a very Wodehouse challenge" 



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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there 💙 Carly

I'm doing this for "I Write in August-September-October" . I'm a real amateur when it comes to writing poetry, so I'm neither so familiar with the forms, nor the technical terms. I do like the poem, it is very short, yet very deep. I wonder what this form is called. It does follow a specific pattern, I'd love to know more about it.


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Review of Who Am I?  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi there ElizabethHayes-DaughterofIAM ,

I enjoyed reading this little account about your life, and I must say, life has shown you a lot. What happened to your parents, if I may ask? You are an independent woman, and experience will guide you well through life. All the best with Angel Army author of the month. Write on!

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Review of Dear Heartburn  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there, Pumpkin

I'm here to check out your work as you are one of the nominees of Angel Army author of the month. here's what I think about your item. Remember, I am a writer like you and can only offer my suggestions:

*Starg*Title: I always enjoy reading these Dear Me entries, they give me a chance to know a bit more about the writer.

*Starg*Language and Layout: The paragraphs are well spaced, so it was easier to read. The whole thing has a nice positive tone and appreciation for the little blessings of life, which is enjoyable.

*Starg*I hope: I hope you have found solutions to the issues bothering you by now. Keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there catwoman

I had no clue that you were the mother of dear The StoryMistress . I was totally into this personal piece, I'm sure you're both an amazing mother and a great mother-in-law. I liked the fact that this whole plan was a total secret till the big day. Keep writing!

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Review of A Fairy Tale  
Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hellofroth ,

I just looked for a random review, and this came up. Here's what I think about your piece. Please remember, I'm a writer like you and can only offer my suggestions.

Title: Perfect for the story, as it had a fairy tale ending.

Language and Layout: Though the paragraphs look a little clustered, I enjoyed the story from beginning to end. The atmosphere created was indeed magical. Events unfolded gradually, preventing monotony.

Question: Is forgiveness really so easy? Especially after everything that happened with her?

Suggestion: Just work a bit on the layout to make it a bit more visually appealing. Enlarge the font size, that way it would be easier to read.

Overall: A perfect read, keep writing!

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Review by Humming Bird
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there,

I love this poem. Sometimes it's too late when we realize our mistakes. Women can be very soft for the ones they love, but if consequences force them, they can be really cruel. Sometimes people hurt me so bad that my heart turns into a stone for them. Later, if they want me to go back to them, I'd never do so. Keep writing!

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Review of Pre-writing  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hello Joy ,

Thanks for sharing this. This would help me go deeper into my characters. I used to cross out all the random writings before, I will look back into those and see if I can come up with something constructive from them. You have given some important suggestions we should keep in mind. Keep writing!
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