This one's a heartfelt piece for your daughter. It is comparatively short, but precise. Having a challenged child is a challenge itself, so you must be patient. None will understand her, but you have to. The layout is sweet and simple. Write on!
This dream seems like a little thriller or adventure story at first. It is short and simple. Decrease the spacing a little bit. This is well expressed within a short boundary of words. You can add more description here.
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Hey there,
I do agree with what you say. Some people take the stars too much to heart and disregard everything else. Yes, rating does count but writers should get what they deserve, and every advice of reviewers should be considered. Stars doesn't count all the time.
This one's a very detailed item on your friend. She's a good writer, I've been to her port and like some of her stories. She seems fun to be with, both online and in real life. She seems a bit unique too, according to you. Well done!
Layout: The header image is really nice. the dividers were not required though. The paragraphs are not so long and the lines are spaced nicely.Use of italics for flashback was effective.
Content: I'd have given it a 5 on 5. You've created the characters in such a way that they seem alive. Every single detail is well planned.
Language: A VERY simple language that'll attract readers. The emotions are shown clearly.
Final thoughts: You could give the prompt here. Well done, write on
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This one's a beautiful poem about your true love for someone. It is very short, but sweet. Some of your items like this one require more space between the lines. Allign this at the center to make it look more attractive. You could post his photo here.
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I like this little tale of love and heartbreak told in verse. Sometimes choosing the wrong person can be the end of one's life. I'm not such a good poet, but I do like reading poems like these. I could visualize a girl in tears as I read this.
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it's really sweet to have such a loving grandson. I bet he has a whole house full of animals now. You've created a nice balance between dialogues and descriptions. Write on!
Hi there,
nice review template here. But you could have alligned everything at the center to make it look better. Do you review only novels, or is this a general template? You could talk a bit about your rating here, normally what rate do you give to people and why?
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This one's a sweet story about a curious little eagle. I'd like to know a bit more about his family. It is written in a very simple language, and is well laid out.
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this is a heartfelt poem for a loved one and the emotions are well described. But the last four lines need corrections as they don't rhyme like the rest of this poem. Just a bit of polishing would make this perfect. Allign this at the center to make it look better.
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this one's another amusing little story. But there's way too much dialogues, you can cut them short and add some descriptions to show the pride of this chicken. Show the physical apperarance etc, that would make it more entertaining.
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What exactly is a passy? Children? I was a bit confused. Anyways, this one was an amusing little poem, it will look better if alligned at the center. You've spaced the lines well, and I like the rhyme and rhythm. Every single line doesn't require a punctuation. Punctuate after every two lines instead.
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this one seems so real, I'm glad it was a dream. I believe your willpower can keep you away from sins. You need to type this in prose form, it looks more like a poetry. Add some more punctuations if you wish. Overall, this was in the middle of good an best.
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I guess every reader has gone through simmilar experiences. I like the first two entries better, as the last one seems risky. This one's well laid out, and you've talked about 3 completely different experiences. I've always enjoyed variety, so this was enjpyable too.
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does this form of poetry have a particular name? I love the format, it is laid out in a special way. You can allign this at the center, to make it look better. The language is neither simole nor difficult. Overall, this was quite enjoyable
Hi there,
you've got a very important lesson for both Indian and Bengali teens here, they must wait till they see the right person, or else they might be in trouble. I can relate to this, as my teen years are not so far away. I love the vivid, entertaining way this story was told, I was hooked to this till the end.
Write on!
Hey there, rising star
Looks can always be decieving, so one should look into the mind to know someone completely. This is brief, yet deep. You've given some good practical examples here. Great job with the layout, I love the attractive blue font, the font size is nice, and the lines well spaced.
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though your chapters are a bit lengthy, but you certainly know how to make every word worth it. You didn't use a single difficult word, and simplicity is important to keep a reader hooked to your work. This one seems to be a soft, family story. I'll read on to see what happens.
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I'm enjoying this more than the break me story, as it doesn't talk much about sensitive issues. Your characters are being revealed bit by bit, and I like the main characters. You've told the story step by step and the paragraphs are interconnected. Running to the next chapter now. Write on!
Hi there,
well, travelling seems very enjoyable. I never got the chance to travel much, so the written words always take me to a different world where I can't go in real life. I like items on travelling. You've written it in an entertaining way, just need to increase the spacing between the lines.
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First Impression: Wow! What a dramatic way to confess love for someone!
Layout: The stanzas are well punctuated and nicely spaced. 
First impression: I never came across a poetry campfire before, this was a new experience for me. 