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Review of Dirty Church  
Review by Mommy of One
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really like this poem. It speaks to my heart in so many ways as I am a cutter. You write extremely beautiful and with the right choice of words to make the meaning very clear yet hidden at the same time. The only I would say is maybe try to make the poem have some sort of pattern or true rythm to it as that and the meter jump around quite a bit. But over all, this is a very nice poem.
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Review by Mommy of One
Rated: E | (4.5)
A very interesting poem. May I ask what your muse was for writing this? I like the set up a lot. The slight rhyme scheme adds a bit of mystic to the poem which seems to add to over all alure of it. Overall it was a very enjoyable read.
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Review of Color  
Review by Mommy of One
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a very interesting poem. I like the depiction of colors and how you set them up to come emotions. The only thing I could possibley see that could be a little off is the pace of the poem. And maybe the next to last line, with how much longer it is than the rest. Over all though, I think it is a very nice poem and a very enjoyable read. Keep up the nice work!
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Review of Dark  
Review by Mommy of One
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is very interesting. I think it says a lot about what goes through a teen's mind when they are in the midst of depression. I especially like how you have written the last paragraph. It shows the struggle that we all have with depression and trying not to give in. Keep up the nice work.
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Review of Goodbye...  
Review by Mommy of One
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow! That makes a lot of sense. The only thing I would really say that could be fixed is try to make the rhyming a little bit better in the first stanza. And maybe add a color scheme of some sort. That's about all I can see that would maybe need any fixing. I like the 4-line stanza set-up. Everything flows well. Over all, this is a very nice piece of work. Keep up the nice writing*Smile*
~SnowTiger
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