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Hi Emilbus

What a sweet story! You desribe your daughter's reaction to seeing you very well...we are lucky indeed when we can do something to elicit that kind of reaction from a child!

A quick note: You shift tenses within "At this point in my life, I opted to..." Consider: "At this point in my life, I was opting to". You might find that it flows better.

Keep up the good work!

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