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As a person who has also suffered abuse, both physical and mental, I can completely relate with you on this story. I never suffered any broken bones, maybe a few bruises and emotional pain and suffering. My mother was the abuser, my dad never knew until later on the things that she did. When people say, "Time heals all wounds", they really don't know what they are talking about because they have never been through it themselves. I live with my sister, and I have seen her behave and talk the same way that my mother did. When I hear her fighting and hitting her boyfriends, all of the memories from my own childhood come flooding back and remind me of my mother and the way she treated my dad. It hurts and it never goes away. Time doesn't heal all wounds, the only thing that we can do is live our lives the best we can. I wrote my own story about the abuse from my mother.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC community. I know that it couldn't have been easy to write this. Take care.
Ciao,
Gem
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This is such a sweet biography and great history on how cats came to America. I have two cats myself, a male orange tabby and a female russian blue/himilayan. I also wrote a poem called "The Cats Meow" which was an acrostic poem. I throughly enjoyed reading this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Nice job!
Ciao,
Gem
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What a beautiful tribute to New Orleans and the Katrina victims! When Katrina had hit, I was living in Clearwater, Florida at the time 5 minutes from the Gulf. I and many others watched in horror as Katrina built up strength and ambushed that poor city.
Emotional Impact:
Your words brought tears to my eyes. Your writing shows great compassion for humanity. That's a great thing to posess.
Imagery:
The images that you wrote in this piece were gruesome and horrifying. You captured everything in this exactly as it had happened.
Flow/Form:
For a free verse poem, this has excellent flow. Well done!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
This such a well written piece! Congrats on the ribbon and on a job well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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What a wonderful memory for you! When I was a little kid, I used to run down to this old ladies house and talk to her for hours, she became my best friend. I felt like I had another grandmother. She would sit and tell me stories of her childhood and it was so fun hearing the kinds of things that they did as children. Fun times.
Narration/Dialogue:
You did a great job with the narration and dialogue.
Imagery/Description:
Well done on the imagery and details of this story.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing your memories with us! Good job!
Ciao,
Gem
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What a sweet and well-written story! I really enjoyed reading this piece. It kind of brought me back to the carefree years of high school. Knowing those 6 flattering words; "I've got a crush on you." Those words always send a person into some kind of emotional bliss, fear, excitement, and other feelings.
Plot Comments:
Great plot and narration in this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Well done a great piece! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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This was a well-written piece! I enjoyed reading this. And you're right, it's hard to figure out what foster kids are thinking. The best that people can do is love them and be their friends.
Emotional Impact:
I admire you for what you've done for all of the children under your care. It takes a person with a huge heart to do what you do.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with us!
Ciao,
Gem
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This is very sad. I think what Christopher Columbus did was a terrible thing. Native Americans probably would have happily shared their land with our ancestors, but instead they forced themselves in. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. Well done on this piece.
Ciao,
Gem
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I can understand your concerns on rating an item 5 stars or not. Sometimes this is left to the opinion of the reader themselves. Your readers might think that your work is perfect in their eyes. This is just my ideas anyway. Thank you for voicing your opinions on the rating system.
Ciao,
Gem
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This was a very sad but memorable read about your dad.
Emotional Impact:
Even though your dad had a bit of a meanstreak, I feel that he meant well, and fought his hardest not to be abusive like his dad was to him. I can tell that you miss him and your mother deeply.
Imagery:
I loved your descriptions and imagery in this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this emotional piece. Keep writing.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a very detailed short story about a car.
Narration/Dialogue:
You did a great job on the narration and dialogue.
Character Comments:
I love how you described your car as if it were a person, and how you even gave "her" a name. Very cute!
Emotional Impact:
This story reminded me of my first car that I had when I turned 18. It was fine for awhile, but after a couple years of driving it, I finally came up with a name for the car after it started having a multitude of problems. I came to call the car "Thorn in My Side" I couldn't help it. I just became so annoyed with it that I sold it and got another car in place of it. LOL.
Imagery/Description:
You gave great description and details in this piece. As always you do a great job in this area.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Closing Remarks:
As always, great job!
Ciao,
Gem
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I really enjoyed reading this piece. It kind of brought me back to the carefree years of high school. Knowing those 6 flattering words; "I've got a crush on you." Those words always send a person into some kind of emotional bliss, fear, excitement, and other feelings.
I think what Christopher Columbus did was a terrible thing. Native Americans probably would have happily shared their land with our ancestors, but instead they forced themselves in. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. Well done on this piece. 
Talk about sibling rivalry! Sheesh! 
