i like the pattern and way you wrote this sticking to the sun. i found no spelling errors, no puncuation errors, and no capitilization errors. i was able to understand the meaning of the poem through the way you wrote it and i think that is very important when writing with this style.
simple yet worded so beautifully. i understand the poem and its meaning. i found no errors on puncuation or spelling. the only thing i saw was random words capitilzed. unless it had meaning i jsut didnt catch please forgive me. other than that, i liked it alot.
I really wish i knew what this one was talking about, im sure it has great meaning and importance, i am just ignorant of such word use. i didnt really find any errors, maybe some capitilization though- but who am i to judge when i don't even understand.
i like this one and feel attached to it because of similar experiance i went through. i don't think i found any errors, but there was lack of puncuation i believe so i couldn't tell where the capitals go. please think about reviewing it as alot of reviewers on here go after professionallism. but by all means, its your piece and if that's the way you wanted, then change nothing.
i liked it but found myself looking for a ryhme or maybe a pattern in the flow of words. i still understood it though and was able to comprehend the meaning. it was actually beautiful as maybe a short story or something. i didn't find any errors while reading it either.
i wake up every morning telling myself, dont smoke that morning cigg with my capachino, and i can make it through the day. but something happens and i always do. what really upsets me is that i know i could, i've done it before. just dont smoke the first one and ill be ok, but something ALWAYS has to happen. i wish i had the stregnth to get over that little morning irritation that always sends me looking for a cigg. ill even make sure i smoke my last cigg the night before just to make it harder. but somehwere ill find an end, light it up, take a drag, and head to the corner store for another pack.
this a great way to tell a story of story telling. i also found it to be very true, not just a story. i didn't find any errors in your story and think it was very easy to tell who was speaking at the time. alot of people forget to indicate that, and it can easily be very confusing.
i think it's ok it dosent rhyme at the end. its still a poem, and poems dont always have to consist of rhyming. they just to have a flow. now the flow i think, is off with the ryhiming in the begining and not at the end, but other than that, its your poem, your story. unless you want to impress someone else, its your work of art.
this one is awesome, tottaly wasn't expecting it to be about kittens, but i liked it. i also liked how the last line came into play again. very simple, short, and beautiful story about a child's simple joys. i could defintley see this one being made into a children's book.
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