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Review by Regis E. G.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the parasol caricature to crippling existential thoughts, it adds a loveable image of a person putting life on their own means while being cute about it.

Also well done displaying the character's daily routine within a few sentences it makes it feel intimate and real. This piece is simple but it extracts a very positive vibe, however my main criticism would be on the theme's essentialist nature being broken by the line, LOVE and live. Particularly the word "LOVE" made it a cliché, having instead "live and let go" may be a little confusing or a trope on its own but rather letting go of worries could make it so that it implies that LOVING becomes a natural consequence of releasing the parasol and allowing it to soar through the skies instead of a command or a separate action altogether.

After all how else do you live life? :)

Right, great job!
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