This is truly a really good story. It has a lot of fast paced action that easily sucks readers into the story and we are left wanting to read more. I do think that this story should be continued and that there should be more to it. But for like being a short fantasy story I think it has a lot of potential. I think you should create more chapters to it and call it a book. It would make a great one. Just my idea. Overall amazing story, I'm glad I took the time to read it!
This was an amazing poem that I am so happy I got the chance to read. Everything from the tittle, that so perfectly fits the entire poem to the rhyming words every 2 lines. Some poems I have read before tend to just throw any word in there that does not even make any sense with the overall poem. But not this one. With this one..every word really helps build the poem up and help explain the point even better. Amazing job with this one, keep writing!
I found your poem on the poem page. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem is really well written. I loved how every single line always rhymed with the past. The words were not just thrown together either. They were really well chosen and thought out. I loved the beauty of this poem so easily shown because of the word choice.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter (as applicable): It has great Form and Rhyme. It all flows together so well that this truly is, a work of art.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: You did a great job here in showing that you have your own style when it comes to poetry.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No errors at all!
Emotional Feel: Great job on portraying Love in such an amazing way. It really helped to see and feel love and not just read about it. I loved this explanation for love.
Overall: Amazing job! I am so happy I took the time to read this, great job.
I found your poem on the Read a Newbie page. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: The emotional impact of this poem was great. I felt every word and really made a strong connection with the writer because I have felt similar feelings before. I loved the way this poem made me feel. I really could relate to it, and I loved that. This is a great poem, and I am so glad you shared! My favorite line was this one, "my beautiful heavenly angel,
my one, and only...one."
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter (as applicable): Great format of the poem, it keeps it short and sweet which is exactly what you are going for. It flows really well, and I loved that.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: Very good Artistic voice, it really shows how you are feeling when this was written.
Great job with this poem! I can really feel the meaning of the poem and it brought back all those fears initially of what's under the bed. Keep writing
This is a great poem that expresses good emotional feeling for this person. I loved the mood that is set with this poem. Great Job. My favorite line is, "A feeling of belonging set within
the arms of your love I am held,"
You have a lot of talent. Good Job. Please keep writing.
Haha, this was a really funny and quite cute story. I enjoyed it a lot. I find it quite impressive that you created this within 4 hours. You have a talent for writing. I never thought a story about a Cheese Grater could be so funny. My favorite part was when Mark thought Kaas needed to use his cane to open the door, when in fact all that was needed was just to push open the door. Great job! Keep writing!
This was a really good poem! I loved how you used a symbol, such as a wall to explain what can happen when we let misunderstandings destroy our relationships. This was really fun to read in a way because of how it shows this. I have never thought of it that way before. You can really feel the emotion in the writing and I thought it was great overall. Amazing job, and please keep writing!
This is a really good poem. I love that I can feel the emotion and feelings in the poem and it is very painful. You easily express those feelings. I liked how it did not have to rhyme to have good feeling. My favorite line is, "Oh one kiss one kiss one kiss I cry….
But nothing in return.' Thank you for sharing, please continue to write!
This is a really good poem, that I enjoyed reading. It made me smile the entire time. I found the poem was very easy to relate to and it had great Imagery. I could imagine being there with the writer of the poem and having the same feelings. Thank you for sharing!
This was a well written poem and I enjoyed reading it. I liked being able to relate to the poem, having gone through something similar before. A few tips to improve it: Have the poem rhyme or not rhyme but not both. This can confuse the reader. Try to keep that similar throughout the entire thing. Also at the end the "NEITHER DO I" gives the feeling like it is being screamed or yelled because it is capital. I think you are trying to portray a sad kind of mood and this throws that off a little bit. But overall it was really good, keep writing!
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: This poem is really well written. I loved how every single line always rhymed with the past. The words were not just thrown together either. They were really well chosen and thought out. I loved the beauty of this poem so easily shown because of the word choice.