Very interesting short story! The descriptive work was top-notch, and all the details that the protagonist focused on really helped to get in her head and understand the situation. I'd love to see a continuation and/or longer story about her struggles to get into another world's college. Also enjoy the ambiguity as to whether or not the interviewers suspected something or if the shock of dousing with water is a standard procedure.
I really loved this! Normally I'm not big on free verse, but it had a solid meter and short, easy lines. I also like the prompt in general, but I feel your comparing a small, unsung success to a bird in the hand was a very creative metaphor. I can also completely relate to the satisfaction of finally having your closet organized.
Short and a tad dry, but very informative! I never knew that the Lighthouse at Alexandria was also called the Pharos Light, so that was pretty neat. The description of the typical 1700's lighthouse and the lives of their keepers was also good. However, I would've liked to see some information on modern lighthouses to really tie it together as a more complete history.
Very short and sweet, I really liked how much exposition and emotion you were able to pack into such a small number of words. The only real flaw was a couple of typos and weaker word choices (ie: "She is only to blame herself."). These wouldn't detract from a larger work, but since this piece is intentionally very short every word needs to count.
A pretty good little story! I like the premise and it's well written and easy to follow. I'm a bit disappointed if it was intended to all just build up to that "twist" at the ending though. Not that it would detract from the interesting ideas about augmented reality, but I would've liked to have seen more done with the concept.
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