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Review of The Sound  
Review by Gustav
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Your writing style is very fluent, and I enjoyed the text quite a lot. Just one thing about the format, however. It is much easier on the eyes when the story is not typed in bold ;).
In terms of the content, I loved the way you incorporated the buzzing sound throughout the story, having it always be there as an anchor to the plot.
All in all, a very nice piece of work.
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Review of The Edge  
Review by Gustav
Rated: E | (2.5)
Your writing style is short, and blunt, but very repetitive. Try to vary the types of words which you include in your work, eg instead of 'pretty' try 'beautiful', 'breath taking', etc. However, I do think you have potential. Keep writing, and read a lot. Try to incorporate other writing styles into your work.
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