This is very, very good! Has a good flow, good rhythm, good wording, its definitely right up there with some of the classics in my opinion. "I'm not trying to paint the villain on your reputation's face" best line ever!!
This is fantastic! The portrait you paint with your lyrics is heart stopping. I would love to hear the music accompaniment to this and would think it is a message that needs to be heard on the airwaves. There is power to move the masses with lyrics that speak of truths overlooked by simpletons. I really dig it! In the words if Jerry Garcia "Far out man."
Wow! Amazing! I heard this with a rockin, heavy metal riff with a slow bridge peppered throughout! This blew me away for real! The word usage, the flow that just joins together with no ripples. Made me think of Metallica. I'd for sure crank it up on the radio, so if you ever make it big, I got dibs on a CD! Thanks for that b**tchin write!
I love how you use your words to show how musicians use their craft as an outlet for whatever they're feeling, whether it be rage, list, depression, anything and everyhing is game to a musician. And, its more than poetry, because then you have the aspect and flow of music along with the lyrics. I really like piece.
Dude!! This is freakin bad a**! I love it! I could see this whole scenario in my minds eye! I dig the h**l, out of it! Sorry language, this story was just so good, I got excited!
Wow! This mesmerized me! The way you wove the tapestry of same letter words together was amazing, and the whole moral to this piece is very tantalizing. Keep up the good work!
I really relate to the last four lines of this, but am kinda confused as to if you mean too many words or not enough words diminish the finish? And honestly, I need guidance in this area for real. Do tell....
Wow! Awesome, I really like this, especially the dark twist at the ending! And posed some really valid questions of life. Also, the statement "We live to die." So true, plainly spoken, I dig this write. Keep up the good work!
Wow! Brutal! Weird, but as soon as I started reading this violent trip through you mind, (and I say that with all due respect) it resonated with me. I knew before I read it, that you were either in current addiction or have struggled with addiction. We the struggle is real and you are not alone! This spoke to me on so many levels, thank you for sharing something so delicate and personal.
What these teens, who snuff out innocent fetuses, don't realize, is that someone out there would cherish those abandoned,murdered children. But how can you explain that to children having children?
It's refreshing to see someone who sees the world as truth instead of lies, the is a fine line though between spiritual gifts and witchcraft...
Beware having traversed both sides.
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