Overview: Great description of the stubborn heart bringing sadness. We can’t control our hearts, I never could. (My poor heart really took a beating in the past)
I truly love the ending…where you say….
And when it woke up and it found itself near the gates of heaven!
(MY RESPONSE: That’s were I want my heart to be)
Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Overview: What an awesome description of loneliness… I use to feel like that at one time, like no one understood, I didn’t fit in, I wasn’t living… just existing and lost.
Now I understand with knowledge of myself, loving myself … I matter to myself and I’ve found others who I’ve connected with, I’m glad that feeling of loneliness has disappeared.
Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Imagery: Nice imagery! you just dangle there, like a freelance spider
Emotion: Nice emotion! how dearly i wish
Imagery: Nice imagery!
the way your eyes dance,
how you make my heart twist,
and my mind buzz,
burning my senses bright,
ignited by your mischeivious grin, NOTE: (typo here: mischeivious is mischievous)
and cheeks glimmering in the moonlight.
Emotion: Nice emotion! oh how i want to hold you,
Overall good work and please visit my port i'd value ur opinion, too.
Overview: I can really relate to this. My mother is my inspiration, guide, and example…God being first of course. She gave me so much wisdom that has taken me very far. I use think that my mother was weak for not fighting back, but now I understand and I truly believe when it says “Greater is He that is within you, than he that is within the world. My response in CAPS
Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.
Great words of wisdom: A lot of people are afraid of death. I’m not. I know that heaven is better than earth and that earth can be horrible. THEN YOU SAID I know that Christ has plans for me.
MY RESPONSE: IF GOD IS IN CONTROL WITH THE PLAN AND WE SUBMIT TO HIM WE HAVE NOTHING TO FEAR, FOR GOD HAS ALL POWER. GREAT JOB!!
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Great insight given: I base my faith around this statement. I don’t get why people try to fight Christianity. Wouldn’t you want to believe? Who wants to live an unfair life on earth, and then die and turn to dirt? I know I don’t. I like having something to live for, I like having hope.
MY RESPONSE: WE ARE ON A LEVEL HAVING A RELATIONSHIP WITH GOD, WHERE THOSE WHO FIGHT ONLY KNOW OF HIM. BUT STILL THEY ARE ACCOUNTABLE, I AGREE IT’S BETTER TO HAVE HOPE, INTER JOY AND PEACE. GREAT JOB!!!!
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Great insight given: Christianity is the world’s most popular religion. And with everything popular, there are fakers. And lots of Christians aren’t really Christians. They don’t go to church, they rarely prey, and they don’t have very much belief. I want to make sure I’m the best Christian I can be, so I can have all of the benefits of Christianity.
MY RESPONSE: THIS IS THE REASON WHY I CONSIDER MYSELF SPIRITUAL INSTEAD OF HAVING A RELIGION; IT SAYS KNOW THEM BY THEIR SPIRIT. I TRULY FEEL YOUR KINSHIP IN THIS PIECE. GREAT JOB!!!
Your writing flowed very well (Rhyme, rhythm) I felt it… all the way through. I will surely follow your work; I see great potential here. I will stay in touch.
Thanks for sharing
4UWisdom
Unconditional love
Blessings
Awesome job!!!! I really enjoyed reading. I will follow you and continue to read your work
Our experiences...the pain and distruction around us make us stronger... with wisdom and unconditional love..creating better days.
What we can't change God will. What we feel may be too late for us...we can share that wisdom with someone else..giving them a heastart. (the answer is yes there is time to do more) Knowledge is powerful for you and others; as you continue to write your life in poetry and share. Look at my mother she's 80 years old and is still sharing...
Were there is life you can do and write.
I can truly relate to this poem.... with my experiences at age 47...I feel every word.
Thanks for sharing
That was awesome... A lot has been taken from me, but as long as I can say I'm still here ...when I shouldn't be and can pay my bills, I will always be grateful. Others may loose a job, car and that's the end for them.
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