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Review by Hildegarde33
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
STORYLINE
The content is very good. It seems like you have put a lot of thought into the depression with which you are dealing.

GRAMMAR
The grammar is lacking throughout the article. It seems to be written like a journal entry; writing down whatever comes to mind.

SPELLING

I found no spelling errors.

I would organize my thoughts a little better and correct the grammatical errors. For instance:

So many depressed people in the world, or so-called depressed people

I would change to the following:

The world contains so many depressed people, or so-called depressed people.
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