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Review of ESCAPISM  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
That sounds like an awesome get away. a great work.

the inversion: troubles in drops melt away I would change that. It sounds like Dorothy from Oz.

Not sure why you rhymed the third stanza, kind of distracting. But overall, it is a very great piece of work and an awesome escapade
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