very nice idea and plot on this story. YEah daily challenges are hard and challenging some times. Well ecspecialy when your disabled. Well you did a great job with this peice of work. No mistakes and no grammer mistakes either. Keep up the good work and write on
oh i didnt get that this was for the yellow cased aruthurs until i read it. Yeah i would love to be yellow. Like a lego. you did a great job on this. Your format was great and wording was buitiful. Your spacing went great with this even if there wasnt much spacing.
Write on
what a very nice story of encouragmnet. You did a great job writing on this and i like your plot for this peice of work. everyone doing the nano needs encouragment or someone behind them helping them through the way. Keep up the good work and write on.
you did a very good job on this. Also did you mean to leave it like that? wRite
Other then that no grammer mistakes. And you did a great job with wording format and spacing. Your sapcing mainly made it look very nice and buitiful. Have a great day
Write on
the poem could be taken about art or life. Life to me in so many ways. This peice makes me think of another poem which i wrote a while back. Lost it in my notebook though. :pp you did a great job writing this and your format was veyr nice. Has a nice day and keep up the good work.
im guessing Karama is a friend or someone you knew. or a fictional character. You did a great job with this peice. Again i found not one mistake or no grammer mistakes. Your wording was buitiful and like usual it was fun to read. Veryfun to read.
Write on
if one of my loved ones had died this would of comforted me. gladly though noone of my loved ones have died. Which pleases me very much. So you did a great job with this peice and its grammer. You also did a great job with wording format and spacing.
Write on
this is a fantastic peice. I love to sit at my window and watch the snow cover the ground also. Your wording and grammer were prefect. Same with your writing skills and spacing. The way you had several letters capitilized made it fun and easier to read.
Write on
surprisingly your short poem i liked better then your larger ones. You did a great job writing and wording this one. I found no mistakes and you format was buitiful. You did a great job with your spacing which made it fun to read. Also all your punctuations made it nicer to read also.
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veyr nice peice of work. Iture is jacked up. I love your format like always how you had jack on one side then what you meant by it on the other side. Your wording gave it a nice flow and your spacing made it great to look at. You overall did a great job on this and i loved it. Keep up the good work.
Write on.
this is preatty cool. I like what you did with this peice. the form and spacing you used madeit very nice to read and look at. You did a great job with this peice. So i like how you have the Tagged for leadership along the side then the meanings in front of it.
Keep up the good work.
Write on
ok so the way you worded the first sentence seemed a little weird. All your other wording was fine. I like the plot and dedication behind this. I like how this was written for your friends funeral. You did a great and touching job on this. I liked how it all flowed together.
Keep up the good work and write on.
Very nice poem DogPack. You did a great job on this. Your wording was a little weird in certain places but it was great in other places. Your forms were great along with your spacing. Some of your poem rhymns i see. It makes it much funner to read. You did a great job with this peice. Keep up the good work.
Write on
Hello my name is Iveltac and today ive picked your peice of work Harsh reality and Beautiful life.
I hope this review is helpful.
Ok so first thing first you had problems in your title. You forgot to capitilze several words like reality and life.
But if you fixed that the title would be perfect. Also your story was very nice. It was kinda touchy and stuff like that but overall i liked it. Your spacing and forms were preatty good and you did a great job with wording. For the most part. But your spacing is what made this very nice to read. Well part of it. Of course you wrote it. lol
But your spacing helped make it funner to read. your subject was a touchy one that lots of people argue about now adays. But life is painful and its good. It all depends on what roads you take and what you beleive in. Or thats what i beleive. But yes overall you did a great grammer job. I found no grammer problems which made it much more easier to read.
Keep up the good work and have a nice day
Write on
Hello my name is Iveltac and i've chosen your peice of work
(Her Bums in Front) to review today. I hope this review is helful.
So the title was very weird and made me thing of some preatty wacky stuff. but talk about an intresting title this burns them all in dust. So i was kinda confused at what was going on in the story. Like what was he talking about.
You wording really helped make it confusing. The way you worded it was just conusing. This was hard to read and very ruserating to read also. Which you might think the same about this review.
But your form and spacing was very nice which made your peice of work very preaty. also what made the last paragraph so preatty was probialy the spacing you used and all the punctuations and stuff like that.
But if you take all the mistakes away you did a very good job writing this peice.
Also your grammer was almost perfect. i didnt find any grammer mistakes which helps to make the story easier to read.
Keep up the good work and continue to write
Write on
Jester of Baratheon
Iveltac
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Hello my name is Iveltac and i've chosen your piece of work Splash to review toady. Hope this review is helpful and helps you fix your mistakes in your writing. Note if there are any.
Lol i loved this. Splishing Splashing all day long. Ok so this may not be a very large piece of poetry but im going to try and make atleast a 1000 character review on it.
Ok so your wording was magnificent. It sounded great when read to ones self. Your forms were also great and you did a good job on them.
You spacing was fantastic which made this piece much more enjoyable to read. How you did the
Splishing
splashing
waiting
warning
That was brillantly done. also your ending how yo uspaced those words. That was awsome. You spaced them out perfectly making them sound the best they could.
So overall i fuond no grammer mistakes or writing mistakes. not a mistake in sight. But you did a great job and i hope you write many many more poetry and make them funny like this one. :p.
Keep up the good work
And
write on
Jester of Baratheon
Iveltac
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Hello my name is Iveltac and i've picked your piece of work Starved to review.
Oh my this is a very emotional piece. You did a good job writing this. It has a nice flow and your wording is marvelous. Also im guessing you made it rhyme on purpose. I love rhymes. The rhyming made this piece of work much better and funner to read. I saw one problem though. It was the fact that you had the beginning letter capitilzed for each start of a line. That made it odd and confusing to read. But it did make it preatty. :p but love is a thing which some long for love is a thing the human race cant live without. That's why Jesus came.
Ok so you had perfect grammer and i found almost no mistakes of course other then the ones noted above. This was a very touchy peice. It made ones self think of love and those who they loved. But overall you did a great job other then the few mistakes that i told you about.
Keep up the good work and continue to write. Hope you have a great day and that the sun shines upon you
Review for Las Vegas
Hello my name is Iveltac. And today I have chosen your piece of work Las Vegas to review today. Hope this review is very helpful and will help you fix your writing.
Ok so the first problem I found with this piece of work was the fact that you like just randomly capitalized random letters at the beginning of words. It makes it hard to read.
You have a great plot here. Las Vegas. Las vegas though is full of bad stuff also. Drugs druggys and slot machines.
But your flow wasn’t very good in this story. But your wording was very nice and went well with the plot. And I’m guessing this is based off something you experienced.
And my favorite part was
We was spending money
Lol so true in Las Vegas.
But also your grammer was bad. You should try and fix it. Also try getting somone to proof read your work.
Keep up the good work and write on
Jester of Baratheon
Iveltac
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Review for Yellow umbrella
Hello my name is Iveltac. Today I’ve chosen your piece of work Yellow umbrella to review.
Ok so when I read the title I was shocked. You forgot to capitalize the U in the title Yellow umbrella.
But your wording spacing and forms were great. Your plot about an umbrella was also good. So many people use Umbrellas now days. Umbrellas are handy to keep all that bad wheather off your chest. Which in the long term is a great thing. So yeah I loved your story and I think you did a fantastic job on it. Keep up the good work and write on
Jester of Baratheon
Iveltac
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Hello my name is Iveltac and I have chosen your piece of work A Happy Weekend to review.
Your poem was overall good but it also had problems. Not one but many like your spacing and form was very hard to read. It took several times of reading over your poem again to finial understand it. Also your wording was weird to me. I am not used to doing poems like this but I’ve read quite a few. You could totally reword it and make it much better.
Also like you have a title for each paragraph. That is akward to me. It just seems so weird to have a title for each and every paragraph. Seems like a waste of time.
But your words did not flow.
Also you have a couple words in bold. It’s like what was that for man. Like why did you put them in bold? It makes no since to me. And again it just seems like another waste of time. But like the most confusing paragraph I read had to be this one. It was just so odd and confusing to read.
Hopeful
Citizens wake
To another merry
Weekend creating memories
Of fun
It just made no since and the way you had it wording and spacing was awful. Well I guess I should stop talking about the bad and talk about the good.
There were a couple spots that had a very good flow. And maybe one spot where the wording and spacing was good and one of the titles you had made since. If you were rushing it try and the next time you write don’t rush it and then see how you did I bet it would be much better because when you rush it you don’t take time to think it all through.
But hey if you fix it or write another poem that you would like me to review just send me an message and ill try and get to it as soon as possible.
Well keep up the good work and continue to write many many more items. For if you fail try try again.
Jester Of Baratheon
Iveltac
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Review for The Drive
Very nice poem over all. I see how you tried to make it rhyme. Rhyming makes the poem much more enjoyable and better. Your poem is relaxing and it has a nice flow other than a couple times where you try and use the same word twice which breaks the rhyme.
Speaking of that you need to go through your story and find the places where you put two of the same word and change it or get rid of it. Here is one of the problems i found.
You're not in the last place find your place.
You could always do something like
Your not is last place you might want to check your pace.
Also there were a couple places where you couldve not used a period but due to your spacing and form there had to be a period there.
But i do like your spacing and forms though. It makes it all flow. Giving you a rest point giving the reader a chance to breath for a moment and stop reading. But also the quote you have at the end is so true. The quote is also applicable to life in so many ways.
Keep up the work and write on.
Very nice story. Although i thought it ended kinda suddenly. but again it was fine. And have a couple of grammer problems.
1. I think its supposed to be a flat coins in its place instead of a fat coin in its place.
2. Also are you making the grammer bad becuase a little kid is talking or what. if your making the words spelled weird becuase the kid is talking i understand but if you didnt do it on perpuse you might want to read your story over again and check everthing.
Also i think it was a great idea putting the ~ in there to give the reader the break and notify the reader that he fell asleep. Also i think the story would be much better if you added a little more emotion in there. also i'm not sure but i think School is supposed to be capitalized becuase after all it is a place.
your subject went great with the prompt. He had something to show his Mum and the Toothfairy.
and i was also suprised that you didnt continue the story unless of course the contest you were writing it for was a short story one. But this peice ha great potential. You could create several storys based just on this one.
but the plot is an enjoyable one and the story reminds me of when i was very young.
It would also help to just build a very small outline of the characters. The reader likes to know about the characters even if it is just a short story.
Also you could change this No! No! To this No No No!
Makes more since and sounds more alarming. which makes the reader jump out of excitment.
And i also love the idea about a blanket fort. Many kids have done that and many here on WDC could probialy relate to that. Your cover photo also goes with the subject well. You also put alot of exciment in there when he said YAY!
Keep up the good work and continue to write.
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House Baratheon
Very nice peice of work. But i cant tell if this is supposed to be a story or a peice of poetry. I like your format and the way you worded everything. It was a little hard to understand the first time through but i read it again and it made since. Well kepe up the good work
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Very touching. Almost made me cry. Mayeb I almost cryed because im watchinglord of the rings while reviewing :p everyone just died. Your subject was one many people go into You did a good job on it. I liked the names of the family members. Some of them were normal andsome of them creative. Your format is also very nice. Keep up the good work because It was Beary good.
Nice Eassy. You did a good job with this. Was this for school or just for fun? Your format is very nice and I like the way you do it. Your topic and the way you discibe it sounds kinda like a essay for school. Keep up the good work.
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you did a great job on this. Your format was great and wording was buitiful. Your spacing went great with this even if there wasnt much spacing.
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