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Review of Happiness  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Nice wording and narration. A very clear and understandable piece. You relay your feelings well.

Nice job.

Write on!

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That is the most wonderful and well written narration I have ever read! YOur feelings and observations come out so clear, it's almost as if the reader was there and/or feeling it. A wonderful job!

Wow!

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
"Or tightly typing a rope around one’s neck to cut the breath from your very pain staking life."

[You need to take the P out of tying]

WOW. The realizm and emotion jump out at the reader. And the ending is so heart-wrenching! A very well done story!

I believe it deserves my 5!

Write on!

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Review of A Prologue  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I think this would be the beginning of a very interesting novel. Although, I am not sure on a couple things:

""His right leg is mutilated, we will have to amputate it.”"

I'm not sure the doctor would say that exact word. Not unless he were spiteful, and you do not show him as such.

Also, I'm not sure on the last line either.

"“He... He is not going... He will die.”"

I'm not sure if I missed some reference above, but the last line is sort of muddled. It starts with a sentence with no destination, then ends with a full sentence. Does that make sense? LOL.

All in all, I found it very interesting, and the detail and characters are VERY well done. A nice job!

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The title is good. I like the way the feeling flow and are not bitter or muddled. The only thin I would do is...break it up. *Smile*

Oh, and seperate the last line from the rest. it is a good kicker. It gives reason to the poe, and you are finally able to burst forth.

Either way, I'd seperate the last line.

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Review of Koolaide Kisses  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love the speech of this one...done in the toddler's eyes. It is a very good poem with realism and heart. Nice job. Might you try breaking it up a little? You know, just to see what you think? Maybe short 2 line stanza's? Just a suggestion. *Smile*

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well written and real, I am sure this speaks to many a housewife. You capture the feelings and thought very well. LOL...It could be a movie. There could be lots of endings...mostly I like the possiblility of her leaving him, nad he "seeing the error of his ways" Like 8 seconds. Without the death.

I ramble. Anyway, I found it to be well done.

Thanks for writting this!


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Review of THE OUTSIDER  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.5)
The feeling and emotion come out very well. It is well written with no mistakes. A truly well emoted poem that grabs the attention of the reader and flows well!

Great job! Write on!

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This is very cute and a good rhyming poem, but *alas* i found some mistakes:

"But then one day the door slammed kaput,
And I lost one leg, and of course my boot."

[these don't rhyme. ka-puht -- b-oooo-t]

"And when a Weed Eater got my fifth silly leg.
I guess I should have expected that rolling keg!"

[These are good lines, but you go from weed eater to keg with no transition.]

"Still there’s many an animal that doesn’t have three,"

[ should be don't not doesn't]

The last stanza's are cute and well written. All in all a piece I am glad I read!

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.5)
The rhyme to this really works well. It is a good piece, written well, and well emoted. It choked me up--the true sign of a good piece.

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Review of What is Islam?  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Eye-pleasig and informative. You really let fly and help us non-knowers know more. It's eye-pleasing and well done! Great job! A wonderful educational piece!


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is wonderful. It alwasy takes me forever to do a word search, but I'll give it a go. Your body is well written, flows well, is eye-pleasing and has definitions. Grrrrrrrrrrrrreat!

I am just beginning to learn of Islam, but as a favor to Dreams, I am trying. AND R&Ring everything I can! lol.

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great imagery and wording. The flow is great, and the subject sings! Good poetry! You deserve the award...this is what poetry should be! Great job! I am glad I found this!


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Review of REUNION  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this a lot. here's one correction:

He gave one last look over all the names again and then to the words overshadowing all the names:[enter]
'This is in memory of all those brave firemen who lost their lives in the Great Fire of 1952.'

This is a great short story with a good kicker at the end.

I enjoyed it.

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Review of User Resources  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a great idea! You are a great helper. I am going to jot down the number to send to my newbies. Grrrrrreaaaat!

A couple of the items are invalids. You might want to delete them.

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is great. I don't normally like shrinky/sizey stories...or interactive stories, but this on is unique and different. A great read! I hope you read 1,000 soon!


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A great folder with great stuff...you might want to explain P.E.H. though.

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Review of Invalid Item  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (1.0)
I do as I command, but this is really good, E. I enjoyed it.


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Review of Remember the Days  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow...this really blows me away! Not only is is well written but the emotion is done well...it really sings to the reader. A great job!


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
These are great! I especially love the haunted one...with the red hands! It's sooo creepy!

Don't ask me why 'm reviewing Halloweeen stuff in July...lol. *Bigsmile*


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is great! Very informative and very clear to read and use. I wish the images didn't cute off at the sides though. Thses are wonderful tips!

Great item!

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Review of Until We Meet  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the feel of talking to the child. A good piece with some good feel wnd wording.


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This has some great emotion, wording and flow. I enjoyed reading it. The chorus really brings tears to your eyes! Great piece!


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I absolutely love this! Makes me wanna MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A well mapped out and nice piece! You're an angel-cow.

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