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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
"Wandering alone I am this fourth of July"

This sentence sort of makes no sense together as it is.

Other than that, it is a lovely worded poem with great feeling and imagery. I like how you used color to illustrate the colors.

Good poem!

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Review of Sweet Revenge  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like the feeling and style, but you could sharpen up your punctuation:

"will you see me
Partying all night long"

The "P" shouldn't be capitalized, since there isn't a period at the end of the previous sentence.

"like I have seen you do at times,
with that girl who is a closet lesbo;"

No comma is needed at the end of times

"a lovely magic,yes,"

You also need spacing between "magic" and the comma and "yes" and the comma.

All in all, it is a good short emotive poem.


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Review of Sigs and Pics  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
I think other sigs should be after the other two flders, sicnce it implies stuff other than HP, LOTR, or headers/pics.

A good folder though.


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Review of Spacewalk  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WOW. I love this..it's well written, entertaining, real, and a grreat story...I'd give it more than 5 stars. I love the space idea, and the story seems factual! A great piece! Oooh, I'm out of words...i'll just gush ooh's and ahh's now.

ooooooooooooh aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah.

Thanks for posting this, you!


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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I love the feel of this. The flow is good, and the wording is great. I'm not sure if I woul leave it in short choppy sentences. I know that it works that way, but it would make the flow better. Also, I'm not sure if "relish" is a good word...try revel or something like it. Over all, I think is is a well done love poem.

I am sorry the review is late. my RL has been hectic. *Smile*

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This had a really good theme and flow.

You don't need to cap. every sentence, and I would put in some punctuation.

Also, I'm not sure what the lines:

"And in conclusion
So there's no confusion"

have to do with the rest. They seem out of place. That is only my opinion though.

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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is well-written and very true.

I always enjoy your "editorials".
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Review of Sparky  
Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A very good piece. I enjoy it. The flow and nostalgia conform, and allow for a very attention keeping entertaining piece.
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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
A bit Cliché. It has some good parts. Thanks for entering the contest though! While this may not win my survival contest...it has the potential to win from another genre or subject, say vamoires, or horrow or fantasy.
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Review by Jax: Not here.
Rated: E | (5.0)
AMEN! I feel anon reviews should be taken out. Anon is good for donations, gifts, and other things like that, but if you can't put your name behind your opinion, it is worthless...just another voice in the crowd.
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