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Review of the truth  
Review by Eddie
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really know what you mean with this. I think a lot of people feel this way. As far as the flow of this poem, I would have to say that the second and third stanza might need to be combined. With the break there, it almost creats a pause, and your thoughts are stopped. I do really like the imagry of putting on a mask. Then taking it off at night.

Very good poem, though.
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Review of China Doll  
Review by Eddie
Rated: E | (4.5)
This projects great imagery. I love how you equate life with a china doll. Sometimes we are as fragile as they are both inside and out. We don’t have to destroy the outside to be as shattered as a china doll on the inside. The only thing that left me wondering was if you meant the shoe was a child like blue with trim of white. Other than that it was a very moving poem. Good job!
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