I love this free verse poem! I actually laughed at the following; sunshine not shining on the person but on the other end of the city and then you wonder what your horoscope says!! LOL. I laughed because that is the way my luck(or unlucky day) goes and all one can do is put a smile on their face. Thank you for sharing this and I look forward to reading more of your creations.
A beautiful dedication to your wife! It sounds like you have a wonderful marriage. Many blessings to you both. I look forward to reading more of your creations.
Oh you so leave us hanging!!! I was hooked from the moment I read the title 'Alive?' and then saw one of my favorite poetry styles in your description, FREE VERSE!! From 2nd stanza on I felt like I was in a coffin and couldn't breathe. Your imagery had me feeling like I was right there in the box with the speaker in your poem. Whew! What a scary, hellish ride you just took me on. This has got to be the first poem where I have so many favorite lines but two that stand out are, 'Doctor proclaims my lifelong death sentence…“Fully recovered.”' Awesome poem and I am adding you to my favorites list!!
I am speechless and that doesn't happen too often! Your poem has blown me away. I absolutely LOVE your poem! This poem needs to be seen by anyone that calls themselves 'a friend'! I can not find one flaw in your poem. The rhyming was perfect and the rhythm just flowed and glided. The meaning was easily noticeable with remembering the friendship tree. There was definitely no lack of imagery. Expression was handled in an understood way. I always try to figure out who the speaker is in a poem and this is my first time saying that I feel the speaker could be anyone! The mood in your poem had me stumped for awhile, but I am going to go with depressing(for the tree) and Idyllic in last stanza. I didn't find any misspelled words. Your commas, periods and capitalization were right on! I am happily rating this poem at 5 stars and adding you to my favorites list!
Oh my goodness your poem is talking to me loud and clear! I was one of those foolish ones who strayed from the path, but thank goodness I am heading back in the right direction. Your last stanza hit home to me "listen in your plight, Rely on Him, the Lord of all affairs.
Cease striving; be still before God’s pure Light, Rest in the arms that set the world aright." Your poem has left me with a secure and loving feeling in that I am not alone in life's struggles and God is holding me tightly in his arms. Beautiful poem. I look forward to reading more of your work and you are definitely going on my Favorites List!
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