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Review by Nepenthe
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I like this. The narrative isn't particularly original but it is well done.

If I have any critiscism it is about the ending. Too abrupt.
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Review by Nepenthe
Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm conflicted with this. On the one hand it paints, what is most likely a valid image of our many homeless. Yet somehow it comes across as though the writer has not truly experienced what they are trying to convey. Begging for love yet presenting a foregone conclusion that there is no love to be had. Still in all it is a piece worthy of continuing to refine.
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