Wow! This is a very touchy subject. I'm a little afraid to give an opinion on this one, but I will say if this is a genuine concern of yours, then you have every right to voice your opinion. If this is just writing to see how readers will respond, then you did an excellamt job in getting my attention and concern.
On the hand, although this is good writing you have a some grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors. If you do a spell check which is located at the top of page after you do the "complete item" submission, that will help you correct any spelling errors.
My guess would be that you have "friends" because like you said, "They use me for my kindness." That's it! You're kind! That's why you have friends. Good poem.
I too done some complaining awhile back to writing.com, about an issue that I thought was unfair, so I can't judge the person who wrote the above essay, but since then I have come to relize that this is a wonderful site that offers a lot free stuff and a very relaxing environment for writing. I like the feedback that I get from my poems which is free, and the fact that I can read others work and give an honest opionion and rating for free. I never thought in a miilion years that one day I would be writing poems on a web site, but here I am, and I thank you both.
This was a very warm hearted story. I hate that the parents never came back for the children, but I wondered what era this was because in today's time, I'm sure that law would have searched for the parents and probably brought them up on charges for child abandonment. You never mention anything about the parents again after the father had come back to house and left the note. I hoping that maybe they would have reentered the story and reclaimed the children, but you still did a good job in describing the happenings
I liked your poem. It was natural and easy to read. I especially liked stanza three:
Her heart so pure
her words so kind
I could tell her even if
I was a blind.
I never thought of it that way: that a person's heart could be so pure and that he or she could speak with such kind words, that one is able to tell that person anything without fear of looking or feeling like a geek. I guess what I'm saying is I didn't know that it had anything to do with the person's heart (being able to share your feelings)and the way he or she speaks the words. Thanks!
Very good rhyme flow and very touching. Happy Writing!
Is it safe to say that "Elizabeth" is really " "Maria," and the one who committ this crime, and because of her insanity found a way to blame it on Elizabeth? I'm curious! Suspenful story - some small spelling errors, but very good. Happy Writing!!
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