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Review of The Coffin  
Review by Poonchie
Rated: E | (1.0)
This was a pretty good idea, but I'm sorry to say it needs some work.

<fix up there hunting camps>

Should be their.

You need to use paragraphs. Try not to let everything run together.

Another spelling error. <tugging on Sue's are> Did you mean arm???

This was a good story. It could have been great.

Your characters, though, are wonderful, especially Uncle Ed. What a devious mind he had. Loved it.
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