This poem makes me want to get a sweater on. I don't know about pain in the wind, but the images you conjure are definitely wintry and cold!
I like most of the rhyming, and it isn't difficult to follow the message. I would (only my humble opinion) reconsider the line: I so feel its pain,
It is short and I think you would add something to find a different word to rhyme with pane.
I like the style of the story, and it moves along nicely.
Sorry -- I can't think of an easier way to phrase this; I have to wonder, how long will it take before Billy thinks Daddy is daft for thinking kite flying is what he wanted? Kids do think that way!
This seems all too real for the time period. It reminded me of the Christmas I asked for a typewriter -- supposedly for schoolwork, but I wrote all my stories long-hand. I got a typewriter... charm for a bracelet.
I FEEL for Mildred.
I have only one question, and it may be an historic phrase, but is the 'stroller' a doll or a carriage? If it's a doll, I see no problem with the sentence, but it seemed to word meant carriage.
I like the rhythm of this and I found I was reading it to the beat of rap. That's more surprising than you might think since I am more of a soft rock listener.
It's very colorful, energetic, and paints a clear picture. Good imagery.
A couple of lines are a bit short for the rhythm -- but I'm not sure they need changing
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-- is the word pyle instead of pile.