This was such a sweet and beautiful story. I can say, I'm really glad I read it. The content was great. The writing was great, and I could really feel their emotions. I didn't see anything I would change. Thank you. Keep Writing!
Your story was very well written. It sounds like a scene from a novel. You should think about making it into a bigger story. I couldn't find anything that needed improving. Great job. Keep writing!
Kerry
Wow, your story sounds so familiar it's freaky. I had a relationship with a guy just like that in high school, but it started in 11th grade. Right down to the 1,000 miles away (he still lives in NY and I live in GA). I haven't talked to him in 20 years until about 6 months ago, now we email and Skype, but it was my fault we stopped talking. I started seeing someone else, and I thought he hated me. Anyway, I hope you continue with this story. I am really curious to see what happened. Thanks, and get writing!
Kerry
Great start. It sounds like it's going to be a good story. I hope you will continue it. I want to know what accident? And what the three siblings are so nervous and tense about. You did a great job communicating that feeling of "nervous tension" to whatever the untold problem or situation is. Thank you, and write on!
Hello, I liked your story. It kept me guessing about how it would finally end. The only thing I actually found wrong with it were some grammer errors. There were a few places I had to go back and re-read because the grammer error confused me for a second, but nothing you couldn't figure out. Other than that it was a really good story. I never got bored. Thank you and I hope you'll keep writing.
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