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Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a cute poem, pregnancy is such a delicate condition I agree. Great poem, glad you got it published!
-dani from nano!
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Review of Elementalist  
Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hey there,
Decided to check out what you have written. I found it to be interesting, knowing she has powers and did some unthinkable deed does pull one into the story. However I found myself stuck when I got to the first chapter because of all the descriptive text. I myself as a writer always want to paint images into the readers mind, however, I myself as a reader can only handle so much imagery at a time. My advice is keep hinting at that horrible deed and don't give it away to soon. Also, please do show the environment, just in small manageable (sneaky) doses. You don't want to slow your story down to much so just give it a few...speed bumps. =)
Keep Writing my friend, you have talent for sure.
-Dani
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Review of A strange present  
Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I loved this story it was just adorable. One thing I would say is that I was confused about how he was in the house holding the baby already. You may want to put in like a "next year on that same date" or something in that way of thinking just to clarify. But it was all in all a cute story full of joy. Thank you and keep writing!
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Review of "test"  
Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: E | (3.0)
very cute, and yes Connery was the best!
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Review of What I Did  
Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG I almost fell out of my chair! My eyes burn from laughter...I had to share it with my co worker and she laughed so loud we had to close the office door. I love it...wow...hilarious!
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Review of hunter and vixen  
Review by mrsvoelkel
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WOW! This was a great read, I can't believe how shallow that poor girl is honestly but I know the truth is that some woman are that way. Keep up the good work. This was truely just a great story.
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