Quite the captivating poem. Brilliantly worded and rhymed. There is not a thing with which I would have you change in this poem. Please continue to write your fair and empowering stories so I may continue to read them and be awed by their greatness.
A good story. It is quite appealing to the imaginative mind. I like how you made the person have a "gut feeling” voice. There is not much at all I could tell you to improve upon grammar and capitals. I noticed that sometimes you left out capitals after some sentences. Overall, it is a well written story. I hope you will continue this as if it were a series. Have fun.
An ok poem. I am not much of a poem lover but it looks alright except that the line: I remember that I drowned....is supposed to have seven syllables but it has 8. I=1, remember=3, that=1 I=1, and drowned=2. Other than that the poem seems to work quite nicely. Keep writing and continue to better yourself.
A great story. I liked how descriptive it was and how you turned the friendly writer into a delusional criminal, it added some interesting emotions to the story.
Something I think you could improve on would be to add more detail about how jess had gotten into the ankle cuffs, like did he poison her food to make her pass out and then trap her? Did they have any sort of struggle? Did she ever beg for release? Those are all things you could have added to make the story much more than it is. Good job.
Masterfully written, flowing paragraphs, easily understood. The characters are described and used to the fullest. The ideas of what characters are capable of are amazing. Overall it’s rated a 5.0. The storyline makes sense, it’s by no means to short and there are no grammatical errors.
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