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Review of On Earth Day  
Review by Cassidy Brown
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the rhyme scheme here, it doesn't seem forced at all, however when you have rhyme at all - especially good rhyme as you do - you have to have a constant meter and syllable count, you have two meters in On Earth Day, the first one is seen in the first four and the last and third to last lines: the syllable count ranges from nine beats to eleven. The second meter is seen in all the other lines and the syllable count ranges from six to eight which is a big difference then the first meter. Since you start off with a ten syllable line, then I sujest you revise the poem and try to follow suit.

I think that the elipsis and "Yes We Can!" take more away from the poem then they contribute it there a way you could rephrase?

I do like the content and think that over all you did a good job.

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