Well no I haven’t but if I did I would (I accidentally misread it) I’d buy some vitamins there tasty and healthy, they are definitely worth buying and then just getting lots of money, that would go straight into either saving, investing, or spending.
I feel Clayton because it sorta sounds like stardew valleys blacksmith and also sounds like a blacksmiths name to me, and old names sometime consitis on objects. I also feel the reason the name would fit is because it sorts has a right to it. Otherwise let me know when you release it I’ll be interested to read
A short but pretty simple poem it’s got some build to it and makes me feel bad for the poor person standing on their front porch in the winter with a bad jacket and no chair to sit in, and the worst part is that they can’t get away from the storm that’s approaching.
The rhyme has flow and speaks some pretty big truth, it’s left me sorts speechless and I actually mostly got the point of this by the first read. And to say that it’s amazing is an understatement. But the part on the hate and anger I feel that you can find in any community, there’s always a group of hate that can never be suppressed or put out, all you can do is minimize it, so I can also find some relation in this poem
… wow this is beyond amazing the way poetry can just move mountains is amazing, and it’s not wrong at all, it just leaves me speechless and makes me sit down and think a couple hours and read over it a couple more time pondering it absorbing it, really amazing I just can’t believe.
I believe it means teach a man anything so they can do it on their own, like the quote says give a man a fish he has it for a day, teach a man to fish and they have fish for life. So teach someone a job they got knowledge about that for life instead of you just doing it for them
It’s hard to decided but I went with greenday, are real band and not a YouTube music creater because I don’t know if that counts or not, but I listen to some of there songs like basket day, American idiot, and the song with the lyrics “I walk alone, ya I walk alone” but otherwise something to consider changing would be changing ass to as (its in your description)
I sing out loud rarely but that’s if no one’s in the house or quietly to myself while I’m walking around and the only time I sang out loud was during a test for math and I didn’t realize the room was quite so everyone heard me still a little embarrassed from that situation.
If I could go back and change my life I would be a little better off than I am now, but it would be better to not have to live with all of this stress of school and life, but sometimes it’s better to just wish for the past rather than live It because the decisions I have made were probably for the best.
This is pretty sad (I’m from America so I understand the ridiculous cost of things and insurance trying to give as little as they can (and I’m only in high school)) but I believe a gun to my head or stupidity because the world we live in isn’t really safe, I’ve heard or read up on story’s everyday about school shooting or mass shooting happening out of nowhere (and one happened very close to where I was once on a trip and one of our nearby schools were threatened with a shooting threat recently as well it passed but was still scary) I really don’t feel this world is a safe place so the chances of me dying of natural cause is pretty low unless I’m stupid and caused it myself. But ya overall I don’t think I’m going to die naturally
While I believe the answer is heaven and hell i can’t stop but wonder what happens if they get can get full so people just disappear eventually in heaven and hell to make room for new souls and do they reincarnate those souls because it should be overflowing in those places. But then again maybe there isn’t heaven and hell maybe it really is just darkness at the end of our tunnel, so maybe we shouldn’t focus on the light at the end of the tunnel focus on what you have now and cherish it till the end of that tunnel then you can truly find out :).
I have to say that a lot of this is controversial or close but I disagree that the world can be peaceful there can never be peace unless we all just decide to put our differences aside and I can assume the chances are way above the trillions. And that only the individual can control itself is not true some people can control other people like governments. Another thing is that you mentioned that only our good qualities carry over to the next life or to our final resting place, I don’t think so everything that you have will be carried over every negative trait, every sin and every positive trait only thing that was left behind was your memory.
Wow my mad lib was crazy but could you something a little more descriptive like the animal part. Other wise this is a really good mad lib you should make another one if you have tell me because I would like to do another one. Maybe make one about games?
Wow … Wow oh wow oh wow. This is amazing you captured the flow of time so well as it rhymes perfectly with time and the mind realizing that it’s all past now. And then describing each memory and how the place that made it has fallen to ruins but after that it is quickly brought to light that the memories that were made there were not lost and have been unscathed from the flow of time. And then to tie it up with a reminder that not everything can be taken away it’s just amazing how well it rhymed and even gave us a picture to have as something to reflect on. nothing needs to be changed it’s perfect the way it is. :D
I think that the story on why the planets are exactly a pi distance away would be interesting but maybe you could also write about someone cutting a pie at the exact angle of pi :) i don’t know sounds weird and might catch some eyes but I do hope an asteroid doesn’t hit you as well
I love writing haikus there my favorite type of pome (and the only one I know how to do) but I usually would just rather write a story or build a map and it’s action being the story to life maybe i could make a poetry based one
I had a hard choice between elderly lady, and female widow, reason being that the elderly lady might miss hear it and the female widow would not want anything bad to happen to someone else depends on how they got widowed but it’s all on the background of the person and there current situation
While I’m getting to cross the Canadian border for an hour or less some time this summer doesn’t really feel international wish I could go out to Japan and see everything there but I guess I’ll just have to be here until I a good job
You really put my knowledge to the test and wow there was a ton I did not know, and got stumped on, the answer where it says it didn’t happen or there weren’t any Also caught me off guard, and I wasn’t expecting to have to know every detail of the Bible guess I better study up. Otherwise amazing quiz it really does put your knowledge to the test
The story would be very interesting depending on the person for me some reason it wouldn’t put a single word were it need to be and just put all the prompts at the end of the story. I don’t mean to hate or tell you it’s terrible if that’s what I sound like I’m sorry. I’m pointing out that it might be broken (or I’m an idiot)
I believe in both while education teaches you what you need. It’s only laying a foundation and that’s where experience matters. Reason being no matter how much you get educated you can never achieve as much as experience and education combined.
It’s really heartfelt and amazing poetry. The waking up part really shows the will they have to be with this person again and they are even hoping to find them in another universe. The amount of contrast In these words really sells the pome
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